All Comments on 'Elena, My Love Ch. 01'

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Wow!!!! What a hot,sexy story.I am in love with my sexy cousin Gina as you two are in love.I do believe after reading this I am gonna need some fresh batteries in my vibrator.My pussy is on fire.Thank you.

XOXOXOXOXOX

Lorissa

All two pages?

Lovely.

I loved the story .

To the anonymous what wrote "crap" You are full of it so put your name to it or shut the fuckup !

great read, your first contact with him was your mouth, just like I would have done! Keep up the great writing!

What a load of garbage!

Reads like it was translated to English - badly. "Thailand. I've heard that there are beautiful beaches and islands in that country..." Who speaks like that?

Fail.

Needs a sequel.Very good read.

this needs a total rewrite by a good writer that knows enough to use a good editor. as is this is a first draft and never should have been posted.

If they don't have the balls to identify their nasty malicious criticisms, Fuck 'Em.

I didn't even finish page 1. I'm sorry, but this is a very amateurish attempt. Oh, and I'm identifying myself.

Ok the grammar isn't perfect, but the ratings prove that this is a great story

I barely had time to get into the plot and storyline and they were already having sex. This chapter definitely needs to be expanded upon. As in, develop the characters, their relationship, and everything surrounding their backstory. All of that needs to happen before having them be intimate with each other.

It was as though you were over eager for sex and said screw the story...well the main and side plots are and character development is absolutely imperative for any good story.

So take some time to develop this story further and then resubmit it.

Told simply in tortured English. But 5/5 because it was enjoyable and I liked it.

You shouldn't make such loud statements in start. Very poor romance. Just sex, that's all.