All Comments on 'Eloise's Journey'

Who is Brenda?

Honestly, the incest stuff was pretty unnecessary, and with some of the other details, this easily could have been a longer story, or even a series. The sexual scenes could also have been much more detailed.

All that said, as a detailed description of what transition is actually like, as well as a representation of how it feels to be transgender, this hits every mark. This is very, very accurate, and for that alone, I give this high marks. Thank you for writing something that is actually real, and that paints people like me in a positive light. All too often, we are seen as sex-crazed fetish objects, and that's just not the case. So, thank you.

This could have used some editing and proofreading, and could easily have been a four, or even five or six, part series with more details, but it's a good first effort.