All Comments on 'Eloise's Journey'

I love it! Please continue the story!

Really well written other than a few grammatical errors or left out adverbs.

Really strong though.

That was a fantastic story! I think that you need to write some more parts, maybe flesh out some more on this part and really go to town on when she returns home! It was really well written! Go for it!!! ;-)

witty and fun,it was a great pleasure to read your story. Specially loved the Historian. thank you

And it is a delight! Especially loved the RCH parts and your satirical humor throughout.

You need an editor, mind... but five stars, all the same.

Very good story. It may not be a "sex-filled" erotic story, It's a very good story nonetheless. Even if you took out the sex parts, and I'm definitely not telling you to do that, I would have continued to read it. If I were to make 1 negative comment , It would definitely be I want more story!!

This is story first with sex and sexual escapades interspersed. There is character development and comic relief. I enjoyed reading it.

I love your stories, but put off reading this one because 'uh, fantasy' — my loss. It's so good, and so funny! I especially liked the Godot moment.

And usually I am a big fan of fantasy but I miss the love and relationships that are normally present in your stories. I was not a fan of this work because all that I love about your normal work was missing in this one.

nice story development and interesting dialogues enjoyed the humor.

Good, almost great beginning. You should seriously consider the 6 years in exile as the next step in the story, then to the meat of raising her daughter and changing the mores of her capital society.

Thought I'd read all of your stories but somehow I'd missed this one. Can't say much more than it was a load of fun (Conan and Red Sonja, eat your hearts out!).

Really feel like I'm missing out on Eloise and Vetra getting it on for the first time, and more importantly, a high-energy reunion with Marietta. My mouth is still watering with anticipation of those two events.

You tell a great story! But what could be wrong with adding two more deliciously erotic pages?

Well, you certainly pulled off the historical record feel at the beginning of the story. The first 8 paragraphs managed to bore me to the point I didn't bother to read any of the actual story.

Precipitous ending, but fairly fulfilling. A very nice female coming-of-age (regardless of her actual age) story.