All Comments on 'Endangered Ch. 01'

Loved it. Great story I haven't seen a story that has been this good in months. I'm looking forward to the next chapter. Keep up the good work!

Your off to a great start. Cant wait to read the next chapter

well done.....great start, excellent buildup, good character development......and good length chapter.......just hope you keep em comin with atleast the same or more number of pages per chapter as this one......will be waiting for the next chapter.....:)

good story. interesting cast, nice plot, good setting, good chapter length. please keep it going.

I have truly enjoyed this. I am not usually into the sci fi part much, but am glad, I took a chance here. Look forward to more.

I'm glad I read your first chapter. Straightforward sex stories have their place, but you've taken the time and effort to produce a good story line and characters. I look forward to the next chapter.

The story is great, the sex is great. Great start overall. Only one major oddity I noticed, a sentence on the first page: " Thus, when the clock was all there was in view, it mattered." I'm not sure if that's what it is supposed to say, but it threw me off slightly. All in all, good work. Keep it up.

Wow, it looks good; great story. Five cheers.

This is a great first chapter to what I'm sure will be an excellent series!

I love how you've found the rare balance between plot, sex, and character development.

good story but the whole magic/human Romeo and Juliet love story thing is kinda played out. its been done again and again and again. still like the concept though just minus that one little thing

I was betting Annabel would secretly be some type of magic user after Chris's dragon powers.

This is a VERY good start! PLEASE continue.....soon!

Very Impressive first start...

The sex was so good, it turns guys into dragons!

It really gives me a boost. Chapter two shouldn't be too far away.

Then feedback you shall get! Excellent story! Your profile has been bookmarked so I can better track when the next chapter is coming out and thus read it immediately.

"It really gives me a boost. Chapter two shouldn't be too far away."

I eagerly await!

Well written and full of promise! Sex, sweeping plot, magic, dragons and a WELL WRITTEN INTRODUCTION, fantastic stuff (he puns intentionally and without shame) desperately looking forward to your next release.

WOW that was amazing. it is unfortunate that there are not a lot of sex stories as well written as this one. and i cant wait for chapter 2

I just started your series; I am going to read the rest because of this first chapter. Great work so far...

You've succeeded in creating a wonderful beginning to a fascinating concept. Especially in very limited words. Each character is near instantly likeable, if not loveable, with enough depth and personality to be tangible.

I'm excited to begin this tale, just please please don't pull an Intrepid Fate on us and drop from existence before finishing this.

Here is a definition of where the hymen is located in the human female: "The hymen is a membrane that surrounds or partially covers the external vaginal opening. It forms part of the vulva, or external genitalia, and is similar in structure to the vagina." The hymen is at the entrance of the vagina, not inside it.

Although your contextual writing and character set up is decent, if not good, you are one of the worst dialogue writers I have seen on this site, if not in general. If this is to be a sample of your series, I'm not sure I'll be able to read it to its terminus. Honestly, I think you're too good of a writer to have dialogue this bad. I'll be reading your stuff, getting into the character motivations. Then, someone opens their fucking mouth and all I can think is "This fucking guy. THIS FUCKING GUY. You are RUINING your own shit." You. Need. Help. Read some Hemmingway, Follet or McCarthy. Follet is best for this type of writing. Examine the sentence structure of real people, how a person would say something. Also, get a better editor. The one you have is pretty obviously not doing their job.

That has to be one of the single most hilarious and entitled anonymous, nutless, sour-faced criticism I've read today. "This Fucking Guy" indeed...you described yourself well, Anon!

Let's take a look.

Quote: "I'm not sure I'll be able to read it to its terminus"

.....Terminus? TERMINUS? Who TALKS like that? Only the "I'm smarted than you and must show off without having the balls to have a way to contact me by giving a name" Anons, of course. Terminus! AHAHAHAhahahahahaaaa....! XD

"You. Need. Help. Read some Hemmingway, Follet or McCarthy."

OHHHH! Throwing out the BIG NAMES on an amateur porn site! And exactly WHERE did we stumble into an upper classman English Class talking to the author who was, unbeknownst to any of us in writing this story, actually going after a Masters in the Fine Arts, my boy? I must have missed the door. YOU need some serious help if you get this bent out of shape about someone having fun writing a story. Sad, sad, quasi-academic! :*( If you were so smart, you'd have known it was pointless to post something like this. Only opens you up to ridicule.

"Also, get a better editor. The one you have is pretty obviously not doing their job."

Oh? You want to volunteer your time, perhaps, for no payment and only to have people like you criticize a FREE enjoyment piece and tell you--without putting their money or their time where there big, egotistical mouth is--that they can do it better? Really. Ha. Show me. SHOW ME, you cowardly puckerface.

Go squeeze a saltine between your ass cheeks and spin around on a crowbar, you self-entitled freak.

Didja catch the editing error, Puckerface? I hope it drive you up the freakin' wall! XD

the negative comments on this story are saddening, this is a great introduction to the series even with its flaws, but nothing is perfect, i truly hope you come out with more than five chapters for this story, this is my third time re-reading this story, its just that good

you have my curiosity!

off to Ch. 02 with high hopes

cool story, but y is he purple?

Presumably because his race/breed of dragon is purple. Or, to put it another way, why *wouldn't* he be purple? :P

and i still love the introdoction to the final chapter wish that the author would have writien more but it is still greatstory

Prime candidate for continuation.

Waiting to hear if I can continue or not.

JC

Says it all

JC

I love the start of this series and hope it continues and hope Annabel stays with him and accepts him I am truly excited to see where this story goes thanks.

I'm just reading it all again because this series is awesome!

Pure awesomness!

I can't believe I'm just coming across this story... It's amazing.... I just hope it's complete... Else my tiny heart would be cracked.

This is the second time i'm reading this story it is just so good

I am glad I found your stories. this was amazing and cant wait to read the rest of the stories.

I absolutely adore this story! This is my third time rereading it! Keep up the beautiful work!

It's 3:30 am, and I'm awake for the night. Looks like you might have added a chapter or two so I'm starting over at one again. It's just as good as the first time.

Re reading hoping for another chapter to appear when I get to the end. JT

Just rereading, waiting for more

This has to be one of the best multi-chapter story arcs I've read on this site!

I just finished binging the series and am eager to see more! Glad to see that you are on Patreon and have signed on as a supporter to keep abreast of the progress toward your next chapter! Keep up the great storytelling!

This is my kinda story ... you got me hooked now to see who were after him & will they find out hes alive after all these years and will he take revenge .... what will Dee do now hes a dragon ??

Damn ... im enthralled :)))))))

This is a awesome series. I’d really love for you to make a continuation at the end of this series and let us see how their lives change as they get older and have kids.

I feel its only just beginning so im undecided as to if i like the story or not, but i will say your writing is absolutely phenominal, even with the few slight typos (mostly just a couple missing spaces) it is some of tge best writing on this platform i've read thus far, 5*

Put this in the sci-fi and comedy section. I couldnt take this crap seriously.

Stop now if you're reading this, the story is unfinished and will never be finished. Don't read any further or you'll be heartbroken.

I think the story is worth reading even if it is unfinished. Where else can you read about a dragon setting off a nuclear explosion on the moon? The author lets his imagination run wild in episodes like that, which is fun even if the main plot is unresolved.

One of the best stories on Literotica.

Sadly, not finished, but nevertheless worth reading.

Great first chapter, eager to keep going and following along!