All Comments on 'Eve'

You do write such nice stories.

I liked this a good deal. A couple of things, though: First, a young woman showing up for an office-assistant job in a swimsuit is not plausible; that you have her doing this more than once takes the story into silliness. Second, the incestuous implications in the story did not need to be underlined -- doing it in the daughter's bed, with the family's photos looking on: not subtle. <br><br>

On the other hand, the story gets romance-y and unexplicit toward the end, skimping on the juicy details of Eve's deflowering. If as a middle-aged man I'm going to fantasize about taking some 19-year-old's virginity, I want to do it good and proper. More specificity, more individuality, more imagination -- and more sex, please. Don't be afraid to draw out the sex scene -- face it, that's what most of us are here for. <br><br>

I appreciate that you probably don't want to do one more by-the-numbers Tab-A-in-Slot-B instruction manual. That's fine -- that's great, in fact. But -- my opinion -- here you erred on the side of discretion. <br><br>

Still, this is a worthy effort. You're clearly a competent writer, and your basic story-telling instincts are sound. Keep it up.

The way your stories flow so easily let me feel as if I am sitting right in the room with your characters. You have a great beginning to what I am sure will be another great story. I liked the sensitivity of Mr Randall and how the two girls are in this together ..... First time stories are a favorite of mine and this one has an undertone of incest which gives is a fun twist! Keep up the good work WF.

Actually, the fact that she took him to the daughters bedroom just made the story that much better. Yes it did feed into the incestuous undertones, but isn't that the point?! All in all, very nice story indeed.

Danged HOT, and well-written!!

She's pregnant, isn't she? Damn, he made a dumbass move, there. Say goodbye to your golden years, buddy!

but can't quite imagine a daughter having a step-mom the same age as her - could well imagine them two going out partying while the 'old man' stayed home and then all the problems that would bring of young horny lads - nice idea though - guess they will attempt to join the mile high club on the flight - pregnant - possible though she could keep that surprise for later. There again daughter could join them in a threesome when she comes home - now that could be fun especially with them both getting pregnant........

What a hot story!!

Well, for starters, 10,000/5. Amazing story. Do you have any more this good? A sequel maybe? In this category, I have never, repeat, NEVER seen a better story in my 2ish years reading these things.

First, good story. The sex was very steamy, and it had just the right balance between eroticism, romance, and debauchery. One thing I have to nit-pick about though, and that is the whole bit with her calling him "Mr. Randall" after a night of passion..in fact, even at the end after they are married. Anyway, good story.

very well written and thought out ,and the ending was perfect

This was such a sweet and amazing story. Very well written. It's so hard to find a story that is actually good. You nailed it.

Don't know how it took me so long to find your superlative submissions.

You have a wonderful talent to be as sensual as hades but eschew the gutter expressions.

Well worth 5*

are they going to met up with his daughter half way around the globe ?