All Comments on 'Everybody's Got a Price'

Some errors mainly missing words through the whole story which made it less enjoyable to read. Suggest thorough re reading of your story before submitting in future as it can have a significant effect on the readers views of the story.

Sorry I only mean to critisise constructivly.

I actually wrote this story a while ago but it was rejected due to content (it was initially a different scenario and a bit more extreme), anyway rather than binning it completely I rewrote certain parts and posted it again. But re-reading it the logic of it is pretty screwed

You gotta love a story where a whore has her way with a policewoman. You should extend this to another story where they pimp Trish on the streets. Maybe even a latino gangbang. Real erotic fantasy stuff!

Pretty good story, but you didn't really finish it - you just stopped. Does Trish get the money, or does he screw her again? Does she get away without further problems - blackmail, etc?

Good, if unbelievable beginning, but the end would have been better if you had explained the absence of the first male character. Perhaps a troup of cops coming to have their way with her?

The use of British slang on a story set in New York makes for a difficult read.

The story is just incomplete.