All Comments on 'Everyone Loves My Ass Ch. 04'

Remind me to edit another story for you again, next time :P <p>

As always, great chapter. Dear God, if you call MY cheerleaders 40 year old Vegas Hookers, fuckbots and fuck-aliens, what are yours then? They're all the Goddess Venus incarnated, aren't they? <p>

See how much fun it is to write crazy sex? *grins* <p>

Poor Dawnie, so badly teased. Hehehe. That girl must be ready to explode with her desire for cock. So, when's chapter five out? Tomorrow, right? :P <p>

...with some of your bathroom reading material. Vegas hooker cheerleaders, in this chapter? Where? This chapter was a sweet, innocent story of a cheerleader losing her virginity. No inordinately sexually skilled hookers here, no sirree. In fact, she was so innocent, so lacking in guile, she required help from her favorite cheerleader friend, just to make her first time really special! In this chapter, the cheerleaders mostly just knitted and baked snickerdoodles, and they tittered about cute boys, like they would in, say, Mayberry.<p>

:-)

Lisa probably has a private folder on her computer called "Aurora Snow", she's so innocent! :P

C'mon, a beautiful girl like her, and still a virgin, at 18? She's a regular saint. So, okay, maybe she is rather skilled in, errr, other things, but still, she's a real sweetheart. Any parent would be proud to call her their daughter. She's so virtuous, she could be on a Rose Bowl parade float, waving her hand in that peculiar way the Rose parade queens always do it. Be nice to her, or she won't join Katie's sorority, and she'll probably try and talk Dawn out of it too. They're sweet little girls, from Kansas. So, watch your P's & Q's, 'cause they won't have anything to do with an organization run by a heartless bastard.

your stories are in contetion with conflicted(even though conflicted won't be here till august)and it so alluring and nice way to leave us out on Lisa and Paul fucking, but what the hell your follwoing Dawn not Paul and even though I don't like the whole lets talk about what you would do, I would do, he would do or they would do, it was cool to give a little humor and teasing

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Like EldridgeinOO says, very innocent, speacily with the whole Lisa incindent, what a way to literaly have something snap and think, "I want to fuck!".

I must also say, what a way to loose your virginity, on injection from fathers cock and boom, he's out. It likes he thought to him sefl: "How bout I just give her one stick in, take her virginity, and pull out and then fuck her mom, yeah, that sounds good".lol, but good.

Can't wait for Road trip which I hope will put Eurotrip to shame(Lets stare at her ass and not do a thing.....(end of movie)"lets join the mile high club" thought the one with the ass") though gotta say I loved they whole fuck in the church scene.lol.poor nun.

But anyway keep up and keep us conflicted waiters something worth wild for a whole month.*pouts at EldridgeinOO*

-Acer

He wasn't calling Lisa innocent at all. He was comparing her to some porn star, and ragging on me for my cheerleaders being every bit as slutty and preternaturally skilled in sex as his own cheerleaders.<p>

He's very proprietary, that way. He figures he owns that particular franchise. ~grin~<p>

Otherwise, no, this story isn't in competition with "Conflicted." He's got that particular niche sewn up, and this is a side-bar project for me. This story is also not the same sort of story as his story, nor is it intended to be. I did write it specifically for him, though, so there is that connection. The irony there is he doesn't like certain elements of this story, because he only likes his incest in brother/sister form. He has no use for mother/son, father/daughter stuff.<p>

Pretty much, if it doesn't teenage girls, and only teenage girls, he can't be bothered. Moms don't do it for him, and this story heavily features a hot MILF.<p>

The saving grace has been his enjoyment of the cheerleader vignettes. Imagine that!<p>

The fucker's been trying to poach Dawn, almost from the outset. Well, with an ass like hers, and a face like hers, he's got his work cut out for him. His usual trick of driving around high schools in an ice cream truck, that's not going to cut it with Dawn. Dude is going to have to step up his game, big time, if he expects to lure Dawn into his camp.<p>

Cheeky fucker, that Eldridge.

Should of read the conversation a little more clearly, though, I really thought the whole Lisa situation was funny, but thats just me. *shruggs*

What do I need ice cream for to poach Dawn? I just tell her how well I treat my girls, and she'll come fleeing to me. I don't tease my girls so badly that they start imagining their own death certificates! <p>

As for not allowing Lisa and Dawn to join Katie's sorority, please, like YOU could resist having them not join. You loves you some Katie. :P <p>

And hey, I'd like some dad/daughter stuff, if it's with Dawn. I just don't get off on MILF moms, that's your market, not mine. There's nothing wrong with getting off on teenage girls rather than MILFS! <p>

Dirty old man.

...teenage girls AND MILFs. What's this "rather than," stuff? This is America. You don't have to choose. You can have both. It's not an either/or deal here, not when the MILF in question happens to be Dawn's mom. That ass on Dawn, and that face too, they weren't mail order purchases, you know. They came from somewhere. They came from her incredibly hot, late thirties MILF of a mom, that's where.<p>

:-)

how long must we wait for another chapter. i check everyday and still nothing new. love the story except for the fact that it is one long tease. give dawn a break and let her get some. more mom would be nice as well.

When does the roaad trip start, or is there a farewell party where the entire family gets together in all manner of combos (father/daughter, sister/brother, mother/daughter and mother/son)?

I tried to post an update of what's going on, in my Bio section of my Profile, but for some reason Literotica is not accepting my e-mail address, so they're not letting me update my Profile. I've contacted them about this, but I've yet to hear back from them.<p>

In any case, for those of you who are waiting on chapter five of "Everyone Loves My Ass," I apologize for the delay.<p>

Here's what's going on....<p>

I've taken a little time off before I write it, in order to re-edit and re-submit more cleanly edited, slightly tweaked versions of my entire stories catalogue.<p>

I'm starting from the beginning, going back to my earliest stories first, and as of right now "Angelina," "Sisters" and "Taking Jill" are back up, in revised form.<p>

They're much better stories now, minus all the editing errors. Also, every time I re-edit a story, I tend to tweak it a little, and invariably I tweak it in an effort to make it hotter. The net result: There's ample reason to re-read these stories.<p>

I've completed everything but chapters four and five of "Christmas" and the "Honeymoon" follow up series of Summer stories, which includes "Summer Voodoo," and I still haven't gotten to "The Play Is The Thing."<p>

Everything else is already re-submitted, and pending, so they'll be up within a day or two.<p>

I'll write chapter five of "Everyone Loves My Ass" just as soon as I've completed this editing/re-submitting project. Figure on it being something like a week, or a week and a half.<p>

Also, thanks go to EldridgeinOO, author of the excellent "Conflicted" series, for his editing assistance in "Everyone Loves My Ass." The editing success of this series was my inspiration to go back and re-edit all my stories. I want all my stories to be as cleanly edited as "Everyone Loves My Ass," so that's what's happening with me at the moment.<p>

I appreciate your patience. While we wait for chapter five of "Ass," I encourage you to check out my other stories.

From Literotica.com -- Forget it. It'll take ages to get a reply from them. I'm yet to get a reply from them -- it's been two & a half years now.

So, Dawn wants to be Paul's first, yet gives him to Lisa? What a good friend and sister she is. :) That was a hot little scene there when she literally gives them a hand.

They keep saying that Dawn needs a first but her dad took that, right?

Technically, yes, the dad was first. Dawn doesn't count that one, though, and neither does her mom. Dawn isn't going to consider her virginity lost until she gets The Lisa Treatment.

Love this story! I had to stop during Lisa and Paul's scene to come myself!

Loved this chapter too.

want to be in Dawn's place

so dawn isnt technically a virgin anymore. shes had her dad and paul in her not counting the fists and tongues of her cheerleader friends, plus assorted dildos ect. so why is she feeling left out?...hot hot hot...so loving this.