by Lost Boy
A whole lot of imagination went into this chapter, of some of it I didn't really understand and was over my head, but it was still interesting to read.
Thanks for the chaper
Once again you have left me wishing this chapter had another 10 pages lol. This chapter took a lot of concentration to keep up with al that was going on and how it laid into Jons new title. I cant remember exactly who had the tail in the robe that mom seen . Anyway ty for filling in for us about the stones. get those editors cracking, lol/ bill
A great chapter... still no shrunken in his chest obviously there is another flashback chapter LOL and wondering which of the non-humans he chose I am guessing that's where the tailed one comes in and as a guess in the wild I'm guessing she is of the J'nai race the ones the same as the assassins but I want those ten to twenty more pages but I would gladly forfeit some length for chapters coming closer together LOL.
As in the great story from our childhood (holding up the proverbial bowl) "More Please"
I know it's been done before but the whole, "Stop to tie your shoelace and the bullet just misses your head " trick is a bit too cliche. Otherwise, Love the story. Love the characters, and hope for much more.
I only stated reading your stories recently, but I can do nothing but marvel at the fact that you have risen to my top three so quickly. Bravo.
Way to much sci fyi unbelievably. Would have been better without so much technical and out of this world stuff.
But that is just me. I have always been a big Sci Fi fan Heinlein, Asimov, L Ron Hubbard, Andre Norton, etc. etc. etc. I think you are righting in the wrong venue. You could have expanded these chapters into a series of books......... The Tech stuff was a bit much for this story but would have been a good part of a series of books.
If you ever decide to write a series about the J'nai and the Phoenix King I'm sure the lot of us would love to read it. I how you continue writing.
The more complicated the better. Since this is the first erotic scifi story I have read, I hope this author continues to write.