All Comments on 'Exhibitionist Wife Ch. 08'

To improve my writing, can someone explain why this chapter is disliked so much? I figure its because the wife is going out on her own, or because she is getting into nasty trouble. Maybe because there isn't a sex scene? Or, maybe it is something else? Let me know, and I might be able to re-write the chapter, gary

My guess is that it is because it feels sporatic, but I can't be sure. I liked it, but definitely among your lesser pieces.

I get that, as it was written over a few weeks, adding a little bit at a time. Should have edited it better, and expanded on one scene, rather than a few. Thanks for the feedback, Gary

Hope you add more chapters....3/2019

My guess as to why you got lower rating would be that this chapter felt lazy and disjointed. You all but repeat a scene from an earlier chapter with two workmen on a bus to suddenly getting a job as a stripper. Then the strip show felt sterile, almost like she was doing it in an empty room. No real interaction with crowd, and she didn't have to do anything like lap dances between her sets. In all this chapter felt like you have lost all steam with the series.

I enjoyed reading this series and I hope you write many more Chapters. You are a successful writer and your story lines are not the norm.

Good Story but i there are so many possibilities, which are not grown, like hmm i would like that the neighbour boy would blackmail her or better her neighbour girlfriend would invite her again and would use her as house slave with other guests, from around or it would be more spicy if someone she knows would catch her stripping it would be more humiliating, so till now the story is god but i allways wait something more is happen, and yes....... sorry for ma ban english

I liked the story, but the names of the characters changing made it hard to follow. Like in a previous chapter or two, Felicity became Florence, then someone else for example. A little proof reading would have fixed some of it. The story itself was pretty good though, but this chapters "dream sequence" might have been the reason for it's low rating, as not a lot of real action happened in it. It was off to a good start with the bus scene, but it needed a DP for it to have gotten good.You had it set up, then walked away from it. Kind of like some of the similar set ups in the other chapters, that you walked away from. The dirty dancing scene in an earlier chapter is what I'm talking about. That one you took to it's conclusion, and it needed it. It needed some real sex scenes, that were sadly left out, as this is a sex story site after all. A little clean up and some proof reading would go a long ways.