by Dujour
Your writing is very descriptive, but you should put a little more effort into the grammar.
Yowza. That was fucking sexy. I'd love to expose a man like that and make him jerk off for me and my friends. :-) I think my favourite part was where they were touching him and investigating what his body did in response to various stimuli. Loved the description of how hard he got, too.
You have a great way with words: the pacing and word choices really bring the scene to life. Very hot.