Extending the MILF List Ch. 24

I wish he had quit this story, he ruined it a long time ago. Too many inconsistencies with characterization. To all people who write their own stories please be fucking consistent with your characters. DO NOT make them go one step forward and then 2 steps back just so you can have to shit to write about. This series should have had a conclusion time ago. Sonny makes a decision, then has doubts about the decision and then makes another stupid decision. Everyone keeps talking about how smart and assertive sonny is and im still waiting to see these traits for over 30 fucking chapters. What are the other characters seeing that the reader isnt? Same shit over and over how is the author not tired of these characters.

Another long wait of months, may the Muse be with you and

there will be new chapters coming soon : )

Welcome back I always enjoy your writing. In the Comments Colddiesel is pretty much on the money. The Anonymous who wrote the long piece advocating that Sonny 'dominate' all the women and get rid of DD, his 'bitch sisters' et all clearly has insecurity/immaturity issues. There are hundreds of stories on Lit starring cardboard cut outs. All of your characters are attractive because they are inconsistent, a compliant DD for example would be a crashing bore. We know that she is gorgeous, super smart a little head-stong, but she is also immature, mean, and is beginning to realize it. She still has heaps of potential. Picking up on Colddiesel's theme, he notes the subservience of Chris's Mom - but she is also manipulative and usually gets what she wants. Turning to the male characters: Landon the leader, has it all, knows where he's going yet doesn't have a clue how to deal with Darlene - and is not sure he wants to. Brent, the smartest but not a leader, but blessed in his own way. Sammy happy but showing some interest in his future is the least complex whereas Chris is probably the most - a mixture of his moms subservience and at times, his dad's hardness, with a capacity to occasionally pursue goals and girls (Tawny ) with surprising enterprise.

Possibly the greatest weakness in the saga so far is the absence of an overriding arc; a sense of where is the story going?

The summit conference of the five young men could prove to be crucial in settling what is to be done with the resolution of the existing milf list and some other characters, and moving the story forward. Whatever direction is taken I look forward to reading more of Sonny.

Glad you took up this story again, you are always an interesting writer. The new character 'Pet' to my mind is problematic. In the past your best writing has usually revolved around two sets of stronger characters. The first set is Sonny and his four friends, the dialogue always seems very natural and flows well while enabling all their different personalities to be highlighted from time to time. The other group consists of the stronger more independent women, particularly Alyssa, Mom, the sisters, D Debra and perhaps Natasha. Most of the other characters are less interesting as individuals but have their moments and are a source of entertainment. Annie I cannot categorize at all.

There is also a theme which started with Chris' mom's subservience and a number of the females willingness to accept punishment. This has now developed strongly with the incestuous 'rape' in this chapter, and the subjection of 'Pet' together with the projected punishment of Rodney's sister. Pet is a particularly difficult character because her lack of independence makes her an object rather than a person in my mind and it might make her tedious going forward. Hope not, and I look forward to the next chapter

I read it all, every chapter, every word. It was fascinating. There were inconsistencies, Sonny had no issues with inflicting pain by belting ass red, but is shocked by the thought of causing pain to Almay. The same with the rape senario, why the agnst, been there, done that.

Also. Maybe it should be labeled fantasy rather than incest, group sex, or whatever.