All Comments on 'Fadin' In and Fadin' Out'

....so what? Why? What's her story? Who is Jeremy and why did he do this?

It seems a rather lengthy bit of POV wallowing in "bliss", but to no apparent purpose.

Writers tend to get frustrated or even angry at these kinds of commentary.

Like the audience doesn't seem to understand?

The issue, is that you failed to tell a story. You merely painted a scene and gave it no cause, no purpose, no reason.

That's on you.

Needs a story. It is a experience, with no reason...good attempt...just need a lot more

I don't think you need to flesh out this story. Stand alone. It's exciting and could be anyone in similar circumstances.

Fascinating as ever. I love these brief POVs—we just see the process and are left to wonder. It might be neat to see another perspective on the same events, actually.

Classic Jeremy

I love POVs like this. Where you are left to wonder just as much as the character is. However, I would to love to see it from an alternative view.

Wow. Sounds like heaven.