All Comments on 'Fever'

I like the story but the part about the Bar seems out of place....and should probably be part of another story..and please no more Chapters 1, 2, 3, 4...

they get tiresome after a while..

Loved it. Different, intriguing, without being too sci-fi. Looking forward to the next chapter.

Stop it... I nearly pissed myself from laughing so hard. Oh that was a nice touch at the end. Please keep it u. Now I'm hooked

Loved the bar scene . Please continue.

This story was great had me laughing especially at the end. I hope you write more and very soon

I Loved it!!!!!!!!

Cant wait to see the Other tricks he has up his Sleeves.

Can't wait for more.

Good on you, keep them coming and don't let the story get cold or become a one off...

i absolutley loved it the mix of supernatural with the sex and incest very well written

Great beginning. Can't wait for the next part.

page 3 was wrong just got home and was going to fuck ur mother it could havebeen a mighty climax!!!

But, because the author is Julybear7, I decided to see what the story was about.

A good start, and I'm very interested in seeing where the author takes the story.

Thanks for the read

I thought the story was crazy but I couldn't stop reading. Great story and I loved the ending. Confused? I know I am. ha.

But most certainly a readable one, nonetheless. Geez. That must have been one helluva dream. I really gotta check out a few more of your stories.

The setup for this story is strong and authentic, but even though the premise is clever the description of the coupling is clumsy and implausible. i.e. Why isn't Tiffany's first reaction a WTF?

It starts well and then falls apart as though the author is too eager. Send half writing like a teenager’s.

reminding Kirk of the story about the farmer who went to the store to buy his wife a bra:

When the young female clerk asked what size, he had no idea. Was she as big as the clerk, she asked displaying a fulsome C-cup. No, no, much smaller. As big as on orange? No, too big. As small as a tangerine. Yes, smaller. Puzzled, the clerk tried to think of something smaller than a tangerine. An Egg. Yes! Shouted the farmer, Fried.

But it's still funny.

I have only read two science fiction stories before this one. The story appears to be developing logically. I rated this chapter a 4 because I do not know how well organized the story line is nor if the characters are developed in depth and breadth. I will confirm that the author knows how to use the Englisgh language and only resorts to gutter slang when appropriate.