All Comments on 'Finding an Editor Ch. 03'

Thank you , thank you , thank you I've waited so long , and am completely satisfied at the results. Wonderful story.

Damn fine job all the way around. You should be proud.

I love this kind of story...you should have this one made into a movie....ya think?😀

Dumbest story you've ever written. You're losing it, man.

For a nice rags to riches story.

I really liked these characters,

with their own strengths and

weaknesses.

I'm still a sucker for a

happy ending.

A long string of events without development.

for effort and content and to help offset the asshole of LIT' 1 vote

By happenstance, I hadn't yet read any of them until you released this 3rd chapter, and I read them all together. Wonderful!

I loved the themes you addressed throughout, particularly the themes around the perils of success, and though you didn't ever word it this way, keeping the main thing in their lives, the main thing in their lives. Your sense of drama and tension kept the story interesting and flowing, though it wasn't in the Crichton or Clancey league, it never needed to be to keep us engaged.

I do like your style, and wonder when those 2 books are to be found? :-)

VOTE 1* FOR EVERY STORY RATED BY THAT FAT DUMB WHORE VASTIESMITH2 AKA BONNIETAYLOR2 AKA ANON!

Great closure for this story. Looking forward to the upcoming Brother Love segments.

Thank you for this story. It's a good wrap up but it's almost a stand alone story. That's the power of your terrific writing. Please keep it up and am looking forward to reading more of your stories. Thank you again. SF VET

Now I've got to go and re-read "Gonna Sell The Bitch's Car"

I'm not convinced that his reaction to the photo from Tom fit the character you wrote in the rest of the story though and refusing to go back after he learnt what happened didn't show him in a good light at all. But still a great story.

Thanks for another great read

Phil

Almost two years waiting for the end and was worth it...A very good story, finished with a very good chapter...Thank you...4*

Sorry but after close to 3 years waiting for the sequel it just wasn't worth the time to go back and re-read the first two chapters.

Bennie came across as a right cunt! Refusing to go back after he KNEW his wife had been sexually assaulted? Doesn't fit with the rest of the story

Q , I may have said this before, but your writing is the equivalent of Morgan Freeman's voice narrating a story, it simply just feels right. You truly are the Loving Wives Laureate .

5*'s

Cpprcrk

What can i say ? it took you a long time finishing the story and what a finish it was,on LITEROTICA you are a star

I have a list of my favorite authors and you are on top of it Q ,thx for sharing your talent with us

5***** and only because i can't give more

it got a bit dark, took some ugly turns, but we had been warned.

in a small way I feel fortunate to have come to this series late. I didn't have the long wait others endured.

It was a decent story about decent people. Of course very contrived and fantastic, but still a fun read. Thanks.

seen it listed today and had to go and find the whole story as this chapter sounded interesting. sure am glad i read the whole thing. it truly shows how u can lose your way in life if u let it happen. status can ruin a person if they don't hold on to their roots and morals. keep writing as i love your stories.

Overly long, My Fair Lady and Horatio Alger, Leave It To Beaver happy forever fluff. Benny and Bonnie for Canonization. Belongs somewhere other than LW. Great writing but ... didn't do it for me. 2☆

...her own venom. One can only hope her life went on moderately comfortably, before ending quietly as she lay alone in her little bed in her little cottage, no one to attend.

As to Bonnie's trials, it's clear that the book grind got to her. It sometimes does. How many authors become jaded drunks on their third book tour?

Thanks for your contributions.

This one, BTW, had the fewest technical issues of the three. Thanks for the extra effort. It made the read much smoother and more enjoyable, freeing me for one, to concentrate on the story and the characters without distraction.

Thank you.

I have read this story at least 5 times and it always leaves me feeling like I know I will return some time in the future.

Really a fine piece of writing.

THANK YOU FOR YOU EFFORTS.

Thank you Q

You must be getting scores based on what you used to be, because this is a three star story, at best. Hope you can do better next time.

You are one hell of a story teller. it was so entertaining to read about 2 wonderful people. I even enjoyed Plum and her antics. I know 2 people like this that had some good luck and came into lots of money and it didn't change them. They are still 2 real good people to this day. It is nice to read about them. Thank you for a very entertaining and heart-warming story. Keep it up. If you write it, I'll read it.

Q, once again I feel compelled to give your work another 5 star rating. What great development of the characters and an overall very compelling story. Thanks for your efforts.

You never disappoint your readers. Thanks for the interesting tale. BK

This was a great well developed story. Kerry312 should probably be reading Woman's Home Companion. I do believe this is an erotic story site. Kudos to qhml.

it when Benny abandoned his wife after her assault, he ran away like a wimp and even when he did find out about the assault he still didn't contact her. What type of husband tortures his wife and friends by hiding away like a spoiled child forcing her to hunt for him and then seeing him on national TV. What did she do wrong, she got drunk in her own home. Does that justify his actions, he should be crawling home asking for forgiveness not hiding away in New York doing a play. Just Wrong, stupid twist to the story. TK

Great story. I too didn't like how Benny abandoned his wife after the assault but needing some time to work out his feelings is understandable. You deserve the five stars that I gave you. Great story.

Q, you sure have a talent, your one of the top five (if not two) writers in L. I do wonder how much Q and Benny are related?!? And if Q is also a published writer?

There are a few misspells/grammatical oops in this series but none that degraded the story. I just wish I had your talent - Salute! Thanks, hope you keep posting as it seems you are slowing down - just make sure posting remains fun and keeps you happy...

I loved the story. But the plum thing and him not going back to her even after he found out that she was sexually asulted in there own home. So yeah that pissed me. But what pissed me off even more is that he didn't even stay in touch with his family or friends and you don't do that for what ever reason.

But the whole plum thing was annoying as hell but I do understand the need for it when they became famous.

the grandkids calling him Poppy. that's what 3 of my 7 grandchildren call me. great choice for a nick-name.

Beretta

I agree with most commenters on the quality of this story and the writing, but, for me, it was just too over the top, and the BDSM with Plum was a turn off..

She gets assaulted, kidnapped, drugged, raped, photographed and shown on net. And Benny hides away? Ok, maybe when he was in "seclusion" (and I don't think her kidnapping wouldn't get to him somehow. It wasn't like he was in the Himalayas or in a cave in the middle of the desert. It was Tennessee for crying out loud.) But certainly afterwards he should have gone to her. It wasn't her fault. Then making her find him in some game in NewYork...? You know? Benny is a real dickhead! He was so-so in the first two chapters. But the end? What a creep.

Are you high? None of that happened. Three pieces of shit came on her property, found her already drunk, and naked, put semen on her vulva, wrote on her, and took pictures. Sexual assault? Absolutely. Rape? Not even a little bit. And where in the hell did *kidnapping* come into it? For fucks sake...maybe *read* the story before commenting on it?

While many of the comments have technical merit, get real people !

After all, this IS just a story. Actually a very, VERY, we'll written, engaging, couldn't-put-the-book-down type story.

Okay, so there were some things that were over - the - top, or weren't realistic. But who is to say what qualifies as "over - the - top" or "unrealistic" ? What I may consider "over - the - top" or "unrealistic" you, (or a thousand others), may think of as normal, or at least not abnormal.

And Yes, there were some typos, duplicated words, and a few other technical writing errors, but so what. You can find these same things in existing major authored and published books. With my background in computers and engineering I notice these minutiae errors and can say with confidence that these petty errors are of no consequence.

But again, this is a story ... a work of fiction, and as such I found it to be entertaining and a Very enjoyable read. With this in mind I award it 5 stars, but only because I couldn't give it 6 or 7 stars.

Please release some new stories. I am nearly finished reading your entire catalog of stories and I am sure I will not be able to find an author that is your equal as a wordsmith.

Gotta say, that was a great story. Thanks for sharing.

Chur bro awesome story

I am regularly amazed by the wide range of talented writers that share on this site. This story was a favorite. I really like the vulnerability of these characters and the evolution of the story was both engaging and thought provoking. I am always looking for more about favorite characters. I would love to see what the next generation discovers and has to survive.

I love stories about REAL loving wives (happily married 36 years). I love your stories. Keep ‘me coming, and I’ll read ‘em!

Great story until you ruined it in chapter three. Really pathetic completely different from the theme of the story. You should not have waited a year to write it. Just really pathetic... and so you know, Willy lives in Texas.

Just loved Plum's on the mantel!

Chapter 3.

The only real critiques I would have of your writing is the over crazy success of some of your characters. I was waiting for you to announce in this chapter when they would be riding up to the Space Station. It started getting silly with the wife becoming a best selling writer and after that, the "extra projects" they had success with became simply absurd.

There's an old saying for success......

"Keep it simple, stupid".

This, like a few other of your stories, had an extra chapter or a few more pages than was really needed or extra ridiculous subplots and in the long run, hurt the entire story.

Glad she never cheated. A well done emotional story.

Finally got round to reading this and most say I was surprised with how good it's been. I think it was something about the descriptions that put me off but now I've got to go and read about Wiley again.

There aren't words, powerful. Best I can do. 5 stars.

You really are the best writer I have ever read. I cant Express in words how I feel it's that good. I found myself laughing at the grandiose nature of it, but it works so well. Absolutely 5 stars

The whole plum thing is just not for me. I guess some people really get off on that bdsm stuff but i just find it demented.

I wanted to like this set but its not my favorite.

It's not Willy, it's Wiley. He and his wife Moira are characters in another story by Qhml1. They don't live in Texas.

I had your skills, amazing. As always 5

Just wonderful. Buff said😊

Great Story

You are one of the best Storytellers I have run a cross in a very long time! I have read several of your Stories and inten to read them all.

Thank you for sharing your exceptional talent with us.

Needless to say 5*s

SOS

Love the series. Bonnie turned out to being prone to arrogance after all. Glad her husband was the forgiving type and not the forgetting type!!! A good spanking would be in her future...

Truly enjoy the range of your imaginationings.

THANK YOU. YOU ARE A VERY TALENTED AUTHOR!

Again, a second read for me and

it’s still a thrill. Bravo qhml1.

What a story, thank god for video surveillance systems. Great story and writing.

What an asinine way to fuck up a good story with this idiotic ending.

Great series! Loved it! Thanks

Thank you

Wow, Just WOW.

Thank you for taking the time to share.

I rally liked the story except for PLUM. I think it would have been just as good, if not better. without the BDSM.

Love this tale!!! Pride goeth before the fall... She let her job go before her family, and almost paid the price!!!

Thank you for all the hours of reading that you provide. With covid ,copd and cancer I have had much of my time confined to my apartment. Even with a large dvd collection and pool table most of my enjoyment comes from reading. Q, between you, Randi, Hooked, JPB, HDK and so many others I am able to do what I've enjoyed most for 60 years - READ. (personally, I liked the Plum character!) 5 stars for an ambitious and great tale.

somewhere east of Omaha

PISSED.

I QUIT READING BEFORE I FINISHED CHAPTER ONE.

Average at best, became boring and too protracted definitely way below your usual standard.

it's ok...serious editing needed!

I love most of your stories but this one brings more tears to my eyes & heart than most! ( FYI I am a primary care physician & former therapist (and also a former Christian multi media evangelist- so perhaps I am a bit “eclectic”- but this story has a gift & genius that I deeply admire & respect!!)

Love the story. Cried and laughed. DO NOT listen to anyone who says that it is not GREAT!

Q's stories go so well, until somebody screws up royally or gets royally screwed. I hate it.

2nd read for us & better the 2nd time!

We did get confused at the end over a few different details?

With so much available money, why the very loooog unnecessary separation of two loves??????

A weekend together with Bennie, Bonnie & Plum every so often - even by chartered plane - was so missed and inexcusable.

Then Bonnie coming home and an incompetent guard allows a 2nd vehicle in without verifying ID, and nothing was ever followed up on??????

That was after a known screwup assistant was never removed from the entry list????? Very poor & totally incompetent.

Then Bonnie is laying out nude with the front door unlocked??? Stupid & overly trusting with sloppy security at the gate???? Sooooo NO household staff of any kind either?

Then - the assault with no real friend-medical-legal followup to Bennie?????

Exam would have or did show NO sexual penetration, and the police facts would have confirmed the nonconsensual assault wand further confirmed by the arrested trio.

Soooooo, where was the Bonnie & Bennie support team in getting the truthful info to Bennie and/or released to the media in a limited fashion???

No interrogation of the guard as to why he let in the following car without verifying ID, and no legal action against the guard company? Not the same consistent legal treatment as in their business?

So the whole ending left a lot to be desired, except for the eventual reconciliation!

We suppose that the purpose was to enhance a more suspenseful and mystery ending?

All in all, an excellent well written story with all the attributes forming a can’t put it down story!

Please finish the endings for a few languishing stories! Please!

SW

Iliked it alot but I think I'll hold voting for now come back in a couple weeks read it again and than vote for now I'll give three but I know I'll give more next time around thank you

OK...lets be real here...The whole thing was very funny...and a great love story until it wasn't... the Plum BDSM thing simply didn't fit...and shoehorning it into the story the way you did was tres awkward.... It was really like you had two separate tales that would have been better handled separately rather than the polygot mess that you transformed the story into towards the end of the first installment. This was my second time reading this which highlighted the plot holes that you filled with way too many Deux ex Machina. This kind of intervention from outside the plot line leads us readers to try to interject our own concepts of common sense rather than trusting the author's logic train. The result is that you failed to persuade me as a reader to properly suspend disbelief...which causes me to get increasingly uninvolved with the tale at the end of the first installment.

I gave it 4 stars....but this is disappointing... next time try to KISS....simplify and try not to run on and combine story elements that really do not fit.

Enjoyed the story but found myself completely skipping over the "Plum story line". It really didn't belong and seriously detracted from the whole thing.

I love how you incorporate other great characters into your work. 5 stars again!!!

I always hate it when a story makes me cry. Second time reading it yet still cried.

I am still working my way down your list, but this is the best yet! What a pleasure to enjoy erotic stories by someone who can actually write!! Thanks.

Jim

Very good story. Sadly this last chapter was really a let down after the first two.

The whole Benny's ex randomly gets excited about a threesome, has sex with both guys in the car just so we can have some extra cum floating around for them to smear on an unconscious Bonnie??? That's really random and week. Then for Benny to believe the text from Don regardless of the struggles they'd been having. The one time Tom had ever touched Bonnie she'd slapped the snot out of him before Benny bitch slapped him. Now all the sudden one random text from Tom and he totally believes Bonnie has cheated on him?

This last chapter seemed very rushed in it's pacing and some of the plot lines just seemed pretty far fetched.

Again would have been a 5 if it weren't for Plum

The first two parts were wonderful but the ending made no sense. I did not understand the separation. It seems to be very unreal.

The weaker of the 3 parts. We are not always sure who is talking and who is doing what. That is a tremendous hole for the reader who has to skip to the next section in order to pick up the story again. That is a lack of respect for the reader and for that, I grant a reluctant 4* to this section.

BJ

By far the weakest chapter yet. That alone would have dropped it to a 4 but the continued presence of Plum pushes it to a 3.

This story went to two stars because of the Plum activities. I'm also lowering earlier ratings.

Its easy to tell who is creative, open minded or simply adventurous! It seems telling that Plum failed on an erotic story site. I gave the series a 5 because of writing and Plum. Thanks Q.

somewhere east of Omaha

Absolutely loved it! Thank you for a great read.

Thanks.

Mike R.

Thank you so much

good, interesting story. BUT, way too much, too over the top as in becoming super rich, too many people to keep track of.

I realize this is fiction (it is isn't it?) but some of the goings on are hard to swallow or follow. This chapter is kind of a let down compared to the first two. I am glad that plum got the fire pit just should have happened sooner.

Hell of a series, a shed a few tears when she said goodbye to p!um.

Loved the first two chapters. This chapter was much weaker with some odd plot elements and strange occurrences.

Yes this IS fiction. What guy (Benny) could act with such smarts and compassion in the real world? A true liberated man. I’m detecting a theme in Q’s work: The male struggle between our nature to build and our ego nature to destroy all we create.

The thought this provoked puts it up there. Another twenty on the five scale Mr Q!

.. and off to your next work..

Very enjoyable read! Guarantee thar I'll be back for additional reads. Thank you!

His wife is a victim of sexual assault and is going crazy with worry and Benny decides to play hide-and-seek? She should have ghosted him and wait for him to crawl back in shame,

Human nature at its best and worst. We're complex creatures. It's good to have some tolerance for other's failings as they may be similarly inclined to be tolerant of ours. As Jesus is reputed to have said "Let he who is without sin cast the first stone". It's useful to remember that sin meant error or missing the mark. Unfortunately, it's taken on a more limited and darker meaning.

LMJ

Kinda dumb

Much as I love these stories they would have been much better if someone had simply put a gun to Plum's head before she even appeared.