All Comments on 'First Aunty, then Mother'

Not great. Is English your first language? Too many grammatical errors. Please consider using an editor or a proofreader.

I thought it was great myself. Almost as if I was reading a poem. Sure wish I had that dilemma when I was younger.

A good story has a setup, transition, and a payoff. I liked the setup, but the transition scene was over in a flash. When his mother confronted him, you had an opportunity to develop a lot of sexual tension, but went straight to the payoff. The story lost all excitement at that point and even the sex scene was over just as it began.

There were also too many mistakes. An easy one to correct is capitalising names and titles. "Yes mom, come on in," should be written: "Yes, Mom, come on in," Take note of the comma before the title.

So trite. Is it hard to veer from rehashing the same old story?

I enjoyed most of it. I thought the Master/Sub dynamic with the mom was unnecessary. I do hope grandma comes to visit in the next story