All Comments on 'First Death Pt. 04'

For all the work that authors put into their stories most get one thing wrong when mentioning firearms. Glocks don't have safeties. Also they take magazines, not clips. 5* (Apologies to the author for nit-picking).

Well, shit ;) Good to know!

Exquisite :) Thank you:)

Mooooooore CHAPTERS!!!!!!! Please?

Brilliantly written and filled with suspense and intrigue... really can't wait for more

There better be more chapters on the way or I’ll be right pissed off.

Larger role for jinx plz

Exhumed Big brother hasn’t done much

I immediately put them down, "Mercury? That stuff is toxic! If you shoot those bullets, it could vaporize—" Really stupid line. Is the character so stupid he hasn't realized she is there to kill people. Damn. I love the story but why does the Main character have to be portrayed as so stupid?