by JoeDreamer
Well you just cost me some sleep but it was well worth it. This was rollicking, respectful, sensual and touching - not an easy write but superbly done author.
Thanks very much Author - you are very much appreciated and I am in hopes of more in this vein!
With Very High Regard
Joe:
You put it all in this story. The path to true and lasting love is a rough and rugged road. It's bumpy, It twists, there are pot holes, and even unmarked forks in the road. You dear author managed to traverse all the pitfalls to arrive at what should always have been. Thank You. This Horny 'ol Sailor salutes you. Ronnie W.
Good writing. Loved the dialogue but I'm wondering if people hold conversations like that during sex. I know I don't. It would be too distracting for me.
Too bad they didn't stay together to start with! But, true love never ran smooth!
Liked this story very much!
Totally delightful story of real romance with two very likable people. Loved the banter between these lovers.
Thank you for the story
It was the interplay between the characters that made this story so endearing. Thank you.
I thought your story was very good. The feelings that neither of them lost were eventually going to resurface, and am glad they did. Great job, and good luck!
It's not always true. But love, more often than not, finds a way. For others...? Not...Too bad. We should all fall madly, pasionately in love just once.
didn't get throug the first page before I quit and just scanned the rest,,,, there are some really good, believable "romance" stories out there; this one is plain too corny and exaggerated,,, but not in a funny way that can make you laugh at its silliness, no!
I loved this story. Very sweet and yes, some people can actually have conversations during sex. If you're having to concentrate that hard then your more worried about the mechanics. Thank you for sharing.
Just re-read this one and I like it more than I did the first time. The dialog between the characters all the way through it makes this story special. Can't believe I didn't post the first time.
I love stories like this love and alot of romance when I get a married I'm planning to pick vlantine's day to do it
hey it may be corny to some,but I enjoyed it very much it was a very nice romance keep it up.
You've got some really nice stories there, but please, PLEASE watch your spelling! A horse voice? and that's just one of them... But keep up the stories!
He said she she loved someone else more than him and he didn't want her and him to settle for less. You didn't resolve the issue between the characters, there's no explanation for Jodie saying she didn't love Ryan more than him.
I discovered casually this wonderful story, but now I'll read one after another all stories of you.
Thank you JoeDreamer
Good romance - and great story on how people screw up their own lives because they don't say what they mean, nor mean what they say.
Was a blissful read, had its romantic moments; was overall well written. Recommended.
I liked this. A good read and kept me smiling all the way to the end.
but he was a bit of a prick the way he carried on but eventually got there.....not sure about the sex scene between them...getting her to give him a BJ within the first five minutes doesn't hang well that should have come later but all in all a nice story and just shows that you can work things out if you love each other enough...
NOT----all the time or forever, TK U MLJ LV NV
Ooh I so love this story. You have captured the whole feeling about true love. I gave you top ratings.I so love a good romantic story! You must admit that it's better than mills and Boone! Love you all! Bye.
I'd have blown up the entire relationship and it never would have gotten as far as the Valentine's Day party. Once he'd decided to talk to the older couple after dumping their dinner, he was a gone goose.
When she sat down, I'd have gotten up and left, rudeness be damned.
When I found Ryan had set me up with a blind date and I got to the party without knowing who it was, I'd have been suspicious and on a hair trigger. When she showed up I'd have kneed Ryan in his testicles as I left.
I'd never have gone along with the idea of an hour in one of Ryan's rooms.
When she showed up at the door I'd have closed it in her face.
In short, I'd have missed out on what turned out to be a wonderfully written love story, one that deserves all five stars. The plot was good and flowed smoothly, the characters were believable, the relationships were presented clearly, and, especially important for Literotica, the sex scenes and the final result were very well done.
Despite the grinding in my heart during the first page or so, I kept reading, fascinated to watch what I feared was going to be a train wreck of emotional meltdown. I kept reading as the two developed and exposed their history because it felt hopeful. I was delighted to see the final outcome.
Stumbled across this for the first time in years, just as great as I remember it. And yeah, you did need some editing. You probably already know about your spelling, but something threw me back then and caught me again today.
""How is she doing?" I asked honestly curious. I heard that her husband died a couple of years ago. He wasn't Jodie's biological father and she had issues with him growing up, but I always liked the man.
"Good," she replied, and then obviously thinking about something else, she quickly added, "Oh, you'll love this!"
"What?"
"Janice is going to be a grandmother!" Jodie laughed.
"Your sister?" I asked in surprise.
"Of course my sister!" she replied with a roll of her eyes. Her action brought back so many memories of when we used to date that I couldn't help but smile.
"Sammy must be ecstatic," I said. Sammy was Janice's husband."
Janice is Jodie's mother? And her husband died? Then Sammy must be Jodie's brother-in-law, right? We never got Jodie's sister's name, but if Sammy WERE Janice's husband, he ain't ecstatic about much these days, I wouldn't think.
I would of beat the shit out of Kyle, dropped him as a friend, and for sure would of had NOTHING to do with Jodie ever again.
Can’t understand why anyone would object to a good friend trying to get a predestined couple together. They should name their first either Kyle or Kylie and make him godfather.
what a horrible thing to do. he decided for her how she felt about him. no no no!!!
This was a really good story, well written, with very good character development. It had a very good plot and it had a warm, fuzzy ending. But I didn’t like it. I don’t think any “best friend” is going to ambush his best bud with a blind date with the best bud’s ex. Not and have any expectations of remaining best friends. I KNOW that wouldn’t happen in my life. My best friend would have been on top of my shit list in an instant for pulling something like that. And all that “predestined” crap I’ve read about here, that’s what it is. Crap. Fiction, just like this story. Nope, I didn’t like this story at all. But I’d still rate it 4 stars, just for style and substance. Thanks for posting it.
time wasting....so much conflict no love..seems like Ryan is hero
...What a shame
time wasting....so much conflict no love..seems like Ryan is hero
...What a shame
Unfortunately you disrupt the reader with spelling issues. A whole lot of “your “ instead of “you’re”. Also “you” instead of “your”. You also slipped in “and” instead of “at”, and “plumb” instead of “plump”.
Please help your reader and use beta readers and editors.
When you know someone is your soulmate and they dont realize it as quickly. Many things are destroyed or lost. This was a great story of a couple that got lucky. Unfortunately we are never that lucky. Mine married another twice, I ended up divorced. Timing was never on our side. 5
..a great ending. Misspellings, unwieldy syntax and poor punctuation are so rampant these days that one is forced to grin and bear it. Keep in mind, these amateur authors are not vying for the Pulitzer. They are just trying to entertain us and in this instance, one of them has succeeded admirably. Five easy stars!
When reading a story like this one that is so enjoyable, one just reads right over the spellings and grammar issues. Bravo.
Your. Possessive. “That is your story.”
You’re. Contraction for “you are”. “You’re a writer.”
Please learn the difference.
I see you’re (heh heh) still writing as of 2019 so I hope you still read your (more heh heh) comments sections.
Hell, i never really got over any of my loves. I tend to love hard
Spelling poor, full of grammatical errors and a silly storyline but I still really enjoyed it.
Thank you.
I don't think the male character ever had a name. Good story though.
I was married on Valentines day back in 84 . we had 27great yrs until she passed. we had our normal ups & downs , but never went to sleep with troubled minds.
Loved it
All of us make mistakes at times. It's good to learn this couple's earlier mistakes were overcome with love. Thanks.
Enjoyed the story a lot. It would be better if grammar were improved: you, your, you’re. Also know that “me” is used with objects, and “I” with verbs. “More”and “better” are used interchangeably, but they are not in proper english. Maybe try Grammar Girl.” I admit that English is a difficult language to master all the fine points, buuut, I’ve been trying for forever. Please keep writing, your stories are fun.
good story, but the minor grammar and spelling glitches are a bit distracting
these JOKERS that fine the need to nit pick some one else's stories but haven't written 1 word. A$$ HOLES !!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
Pushy manipulative assholes. He needs to grow a pair. I gave up at the valentine's day party. His friend is an asshole.
Really hate Kyle as a best friend, more like a bastardo.
And Jodie's smirks from her intro is even worse!!
NOT WORTH FINISHING THIS CRAP
Totally agree with. flareb2343 about people who have never written a damn thing, trashing stories posted here. You can critique a story, an author, without being stupid ugly about it. But enough. I liked this story, it seemed like he and Jodie were meant to be together. Just took them a while to get there. I will say that I too think Kyle was a bit of a dick with the blind date thing. Thanks for the story, Joe.
Everyone needs a best friend like Kyle. It takes love and courage to do something for a friend, that’s in their best interest, knowing full well that they will be pissed off. Most of us know what we want, but not many of us know what we really need. Great story! I will be revisiting this one.
good. I was hoping after they made a baby and wed that they would accidentally or fatefully run into the same older cople at the restaurant and continue their story.
And the Oscar for most insecure and wishy-washy character in LW goes to …
The MC of this story!
I mean seriously, this guy has more whines more than the average liquor store.
A story about idiots? and an author that doesn't know the difference between then and than...
Do t let the naysayers win! Great story, if you need an editor who knows then/than, their/they're/there, etc.... contact me.
I’m with some of the others. This guy who was the main char came off as completely off putting. While some off your other leads are fabulous this guy came across as a petulant dick. Hated it.
Easily one of the quickest 5’s I’ve ever given. The dialog was really well done and the character development was good for those that mattered. In high school he was a basically shy guy that fell head over heels in love with Jodie. It happens and you can’t help the feelings that are inside you. Don’t forget that it’s a story. Try to focus on the writer’s skills and not why his characters were bitches or shy. If all you have to complain about is his misuse of then and than you need to get a life. Those are pretty minor errors. I loved the story & can’t wait to read more of this author’s stories.
5-😊😊😊😊😊’s
Jodie was a bitch.....hated her arrogant bitchy character.....so much for fucking romance.....just a demanding bitch
Great story. Enough to ignore the grammatical/spelling issues. Love it when a title contributes to a story instead of summarizing. In this case it lets us know the fate of the couple after the story.
Sorry, you lost me when he stayed at the party when she showed up. Then start acting like everything is normal. When he couldn’t stand to be around her in the earlier pages. Made no sense. Didn’t feel like going through all the angst that I saw coming. LM
Nice story. Old love comes back to be his wife. Peculiar story, but interesting. 👍
Good job making the narrator seem like a real prick until we finally learn the whole story. By the end I was 100 percent pulling for these two to get their happily ever after.
Fucking stupid. Asshole MC needs better friends than the bitch Kyle. Jodie is a fuck up