by geronimo_appleby
If this is your first attempt at writting gay or bi porn, you did a very good job.
I would really like to see more written as though you are telling me about something we are doing (first person?) ...using I and you. You know...
Other than that, your story was really nice...sure made me hard.
If it is a matter for vote
I did enjoy this, well told and nice plot.
First time cocksucking stories are my favorite... I would have liked to seen a little more detail instead of the rushed ending (wife coming home)... The dramatic build up to first spurt of cum in the mouth is what I dig reading... I've written a couple stories on this subject... I really liked your story though... Hope you write some more like it... Check mine out on this site, you may like them too... debear...
Good story.. left me wanting more though.. made me wish I had a man of my own here that I could taste. Please hurry up with the sequel.
I liked it a lot, but the 'cumslut' and 'whore' comments in their dialogue seemed out of place.
This was a well told story. I tend to look for the bi stories and it does seem to bring something out in me. keep it up.
Your adjectives are good and yor passage of time is excellent.
You have the makings of a very good writer
Good luck for the future
Hot does not begin to describe the writing...well worded & life like...I actually put a pencil between my lips as I read your erotic story....GREAT...
Loved the whole urgency of the situation and I think you carried off the tense very well. I would definitely read more gay stories that you happen to come up with. Bring on the butt sex!
I hope you write more gay/bi stories...enjoy the "first cocksucking" aspect. I found myself wanting to taste a man too. Thanks and please try another.
sperm all over them and the wife walks in.
the dude knew he came there to taste sperm
and it was more than a mouthful
brings back the time i got sucked the first an how it made me feel so good i had to suck his my first time
sucking a well endowed cock is one of my deepest fantasies, although im not into the kissing. great story.
ya cant leave us hangin like this! wat about the wife? pil should look at her, and go to his knees to clean your cock with his mouth, looking her in the eye the whole time...
Good first story. Like the background of Phil, Karen and 'Mate'. Thought Phil & 'Mate' were believable. Story was good. Thought it tacky for Phil to invite him over for first just guy on guy without telling him previously unknown wife might be home soon. That was not fair! Please write some more.
I've never sucked a dick but have wondered what it would be like and want to try it.
You are such a good writer... this is both insanely hot and has some really nice description too. The line about a once familiar town is particularly good -- because that's exactly how I felt when I got my hands on my first cock! Top marks...
I have never sucked a cock but would surely do it if the right situation arose. Reading your story got me raging hard and my hand working me to climax. Good writing. The one thing I don't think I could ever do is kiss a man, just the thought seems to gross me out, but as they say, never say never.
great story, I too would welcome a hot, hard cock to suck on and receive the load i'd be working for. that was soooo fucking sexy thinking about kneeling at the floor looking up at a hard cock waiting to be placed in my mouth. help me out and let me know if anyone would like me to suck on their cock giving me my first time. hope to see more first time stories!!!
I finally tried it, and I regret only that I didn't take the plunge earlier. I'm convinced we're naturally bisexual, and are simply trained otherwise.
As a female, I get really wet thinking of cocksuckers, especially first-timers, their internal debates, they're straight but masturbate, dreaming of sucking on a pulsating cock. I like to peer into their filthy desires and doubts, their lust for swallowing ropes of cum, eyes in the back of their head, knowing that they have fallen in love with cock and realizing that they will always be wanting more.
My kind of man.
I'm not so keen on the kissing though.
Great story but you better have a next chapter after getting caught by his wife. Was she pissed? Did she get turned on? Did she offer to join in? You must answer these questions and more.
so descriptive with keen details. The sucking. The slurping. The taste of sperm. The 21 st century is allowing more men especially white men to experience homosexuality like they have always wanted.Better than the stench trench.