by Magicwrtr
Very very good. This is shaping up to be my favorite all-time story on Literotica.
One small thing - Sara. Adding a fifth girl seems almost too much, at least to me, but it seems that is at least 3 or 4 chapters away if it would happen at all, and even if it did I'm sure you'll handle it perfectly. So far you haven't given any reason to doubt your abilities, so I'll trust in them :)
And I'm curious about Nicci. Will she really stay behind while the rest move to Egeria? Probably not, but how will she convince her father?
This is a great story. One of the best I've read. Please continue. Thank you for the longer chapter. 5*-more if I could! Especially many thanks for using your own free time to entertain us!
The sex scenes with Kat are always so hot!!!
Thanks for posting :)
I'm looking foreword to the final chapter. Then I guess it's onto Book 2.
Don’t like it. They are at war. Seeing their soldiers die and villagers killed as well as village burned. Hell every time they blink they are fucking. Something this long with all the imagination going into it should have more meat. Before you start I know this is a jerk site but still. I’ve seen stories here that are long with more story and plenty of long dirty sex scenes. They are timed right giving us more story. I’m sure you just wanted to write a whack fest but it better with some build up and some work done. This dude wakes up and girls are ready to get naked. It is an ok story, I’m still reading it. I wish for little more meat. More about the war and the magics. More about these ladies
I agree with 2Reader, some buildup would be good. They all seem like mindless sex machines at times. Some suspense and surprises/twists would also be good...constant sex and an ideal happy ending seems like a given. Make them work for it a bit. The most exciting scenes are the unexpected ones.
I know this is easy to say from my 'armchair', I realize writing a complex story is very difficult and well beyond my skill level. :)
Justin isn't very bright.
Nora could communicate with Nicci by carrying sounds on the wind.
Sally might also have a messenger spell, or is she only able to do lightning?