by msgrant67
Love Toni's casual control of Paul, she's convincingly confident and obviously has a deliciously devious mind.
I did find the perspective a little odd though - it's first-person, but it seems to switch strangely into third-person during the Paul/Phoebe scene. Not a huge problem, I just found it slightly jarring.
Looking forward to seeing what's in store for Paul!
I really like how Paul is being manipulated. I didn't notice the 1st & 3rd person issue & I re-read it based on the 1st person/ 3rd person comments. I think that is written 1st person from Toni's pov. Her scenes are 1st person and the scenes w/o her are told 3rd, since she isn't present.
Great continuation of the story, looking forward to reading the next chapters!