All Comments on 'For the Love of Lana Ch. 01'

A nice combination of tsundere. opinionated characters and highly passionate relations. Great pace and intensity, no filler.

Thanks for sharing the inspiration.

Please get an editor, you would benefit from that kind of assistance. A lot.

there needs to be connections between each thought. How are they suddenly at dinner? How do they communicate at all? Also, please separate paragraphs between settings, whos speaking, and what the topic is. This is stuff an editor could help you with.