All Comments on 'Forever Yours Ch. 08'

Quite a story. LOVE it, cant wait for the nest chapter

Loving this story and daily look for my dose of Ramon!!! I cried...I actually cried for Ramon many time during this chapter ... Please let the earth open ans swallow Marcos' mother, sister and Dan!!! God, how can people be so evil???

Looking forward to payback when he does return though... Well done loving it that you for sharing!

Your story reads almost like a dream, a torrent of ideas, unconnected jumps and story threads presented without any logic or forewarning. And no, that isn't a criticism, it's an interesting way of presenting your plot. And it's very enjoyable reading.

I look forward to many more chapters. And whilst I have little time for Maddison or Olivia I suspect Dan may turn out to be a little more sympathetic. Maybe he will find his redemption in the arms of Mark, or is that position to be filled by Eduardo.

Please post the next chapter already. I'm addicted to this story.

so hope that Marcos hears Dan talking with his mom and learns the truth about what happened to Ramon cant wait for the next chapter thanks John

especially, with the introduction of his biological father. I had to read through it a few times before I realized which father was speaking, or was spoken to. There's a lot of useless information, weird wording, no segues, and misuse of names. I do like your story despite the major flaws. Looking forward to ch. 9.

Have seen and read the comments about structure of the story / useless information / weird wording and unconnected jumps .... Maybe this is true, but it can easily be resolved by asking your readers if anyone is willing to edit the story for you .... Just a thought it might help in future chapter and stories. Remember, even an English professor needs proof reader / editor if they publish.

Personally I love the stories that you have written and because I love the story I see past all this and to me the story is excellent!

I have heard you guys and I will do my best to improve. thank u for your comments

one of the best I have ever read cannot wait for the next chapter keep up the teriffic work

Omg i can't wait for the next chapter

Love this chapter! Had me in tears and smiles! Cant wait for the next one!

If I remember correctly, isn't Marcos twin sister involved with that shoe company? That could make some interesting waves. Too bad Ramon's father doesn't have some interest in Kimberly Clark (or which ever tissue company we readers support). I know I shed a few tears reading this chapter.

Aside from the errors, I still gave it a five. Am loving this story.

Wow!!! 👍👍👍

I just love where this story is hopefully going. Well done young man/woman, ( I think man) as English is not your first language and you are making this story so believable, I am really enjoying it and you will get another 5 stars from me

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