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reneebanksabout 10 years agoI really like when a piece of writing almost feels like reading a person's diary or being privy to those intimate thoughts reserved for only a select few. That's what this was for me. I felt like I knew the character and went through the struggles with her. I would have really liked more interaction between her and Abraham. I don't think there was enough of a connection, for me, between these two to really root for the relationship. A piece of constructive critiscim: be sure to use quotation marks with dialogue, so the reader knows who is speaking. There's so much substance here and I learned a bit about another culture. I hope others see the potential and offer CONSTRUCTIVE ADVICE instead of unnecessarily bashing your work.
