by kara_love
I skipped through most of the story to get to the end but sadly it only got worse. In future I'll just avoid any more time wasting by not bothering to read any more chapters. Wimp stories just piss me off.
Your breaks may fail or your fuel system may glog up with cream or maybe some home made c4 attached to the ignition wires. Take the bus asswipe. If this is what gets you off be careful next time you get into your car.
in Loving Wives? There isn't even a wife in this... More proof the editors don't care what catgory a story is. Probably get better scores if it's posted properlyly. What a shame... 0*
Love the story so far, and looking forward to more chapters. Well done!
higginsword speaks the true, he's a willing cocksucker and so is the other sick fuck that thought this was a good fucking story.
Get the fuck of this shit you miserable dickhead! Write a decent story and not this pathetic garbage.
. . . that is very well written; the feelings of drama in each character comes through. That the characters are all seriously flawed doesn't matter to the story. Jess is very obviously a submissive; her boyfriend lover has no strength of character, and Mark is very properly described as douche bag. All that matters naught as long as the characters follow the plot and the story takes us somewhere interesting.
That's what good stories are supposed to do.
Guys the author is female. She doesn't care if you call her a wimp. I will have to say though that she is definitely sick in the fucking head and gets off on betrayal. That kind of makes her a piece of shit in my book but do your own thing in your own time I guess.
I'm not surprised it went the sick ass cuckold freak direction! This author is a sicko who wrote a story about drugging her own sister! So consider the fucking source!!!
idea behind the story, it is so bad that i wondered who wrote it so i checked it was a a young girl so sad.
I hoped for some eroticism. Why is she getting married? And don't say because she loves him when she clearly doesn't.
I'm sorry but this was written by a sick ass bitch with shit for brains! -1*
It is very interesting why do not the cuckold story writers write such stories, where the author shows the time perspective for the cuckold pairs.
What are the interesting things, what I am curiouse?
How the cuckold pairs live 30-40 years together? The hot wives takes the home made food to the cuck to the HOSPICE? Are the hot wives at the bed of the cuck in the HOSPICE everyday?
How the cuck pairs bring up their children? Will the son be small cuck aprentice when he is 18 years old? Will the daughter be small hot wife aprentice, when she is 18 years old?
If the biological father is not the cuck, when the cuck pair say the DNA truth to the children?
Taleyrand's famouse way of saying should turn a little. The original is this: "This thing is not only sin, but mistake!" The version: "Thes stories are not only disguesting, BUT BORING!"
I have a (revenge) story version with a cuck hot wife pair, who brings up a normal sexual majority son...................I will write later...........
I laugh at this story because it is well written. Like someone pointed out, the girl is just a cheating slut that loves getting dominated by jerk assholes, and tame, wimp nice guys like her boyfriend dont light up her fire. The only grip is why is this story is in LW because there is no one married.
Please throw you keyboard away so we dont have to suffer any more of this crap.
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Seems just a little wierd. This is your fantasy, to humiliiate and demean your wimp fantasy husband. So you write the story as him with the real you in third person. Not erotic from the male perspective, believe me.
As others have stated - quit submitting this garbage.
I enjoyed this story, though I wish there was a bit more to it. I really liked how she looked at the camera in willful disregard for her reputation and relationship even if she had no idea it was her boyfriend on the other end.
She does not love you. Kick her ass out. Then you do not need to write the rest of the crap you presented here.
I cannot believe that people write negative comments about these stories! If you don't like em - why read em?! It's like hating anchovies but deciding to buy and eat some anyway. Then writing to complain about it to a bunch of random strangers on a website. I mean, why bother?
This is a BDSM story. It will fare much better when properly grouped! It is worthy of high scores IN THAT CATEGORY!
I din't read the first part and I'm glad i didn't. A whore, a wimp and an asshole. Not much good can come out of that. Oh wait. Maybe the wimp will grow a pair, kick the lying whore out and kick the asshole so hard he loses his balls. But most likely not. And as far as reading it if I don't like it, I'm not a fucking prophet who knows how the story will come out unlike some dickwads on here.
Given the bio on this author, she is a young woman 18-22. Is this her fantasy? Does it get her off to humiliate a man? To lie, and cheat on her man? What is this? Weird. If she has a man, he should be wary. This is the fantasy of a strange and warped woman. Certainly not marriage material. Yuck.
so many Anonymous posters. Guess they are little chicken shit queers. If your going to give an opinion at least man up to it.
You fucking piece of shit. Didn't say one fucking word about the story but wasted space bitching about other readers. Noticed your bio doesn't say shit about you. Expect for that stupid surname, you're as anonymous as anybody else on this site. Go fuck yourself . Next time don't read the comments if they bother you so much. As far as this story, nothing but trash, both chapters. Skimmed through them, not worth reading. Nothing but fucking wimp ass cuckolds. 1*
THis story deserves a -10stars, it is definitely not worth reading. All I can say is, if you are in fact a female, and you treat your boyfriend or husband like this, you should be kicked in the cunt so hard you wear it as a hat for a month.
I am still not sure what the relationship is between Loving Wives and Cuckolding yet the stories keep flowing in this theme. This story looked to be heading somewhere at the begining but just died, again. The story is essentially flat at the moment.
You do need to do something. Obviously the girlfriend is not aware her man is aware of her other activities, the boyfriend is questioning his masculinity - something needs to happen although the track record displayed so far is not promising.
I found this story very funny? Why? Maybe cause it was almost certainly meant to irritate the chronic cuckold tale flamers (read the author's comment after Ch. 01). Maybe cause there were honest to goodness moments of dark humor ("let her breathe, please"...."All I could see was Jess's face, buried in pubes"). Or maybe because the whole thing was just so over the top-the last line was the perfect way to end this travesty.
Really well written, snappy delivery with attention to detail and subtle (and not so subtle) characer development. Much hotter content than the previous chapter, too (took the reins off?), though I don't get turned on by either cuck themes or, generally speaking, rough stuff.
I am actually much more interested in reading your output in other genres, I imagine you can write a hot tale in nearly any category on Lit. Your talent is wasted (for me) on this cuck stuff.
Hilarious to see so many people who supposedly 'hate' cuck stories reading yet another one! Honestly - please tell me, if you really do hate them, then why are you here reading them?? Classic insecurity/ denial methinks. Why else are the haters so passionate about the subject !
This story is incredibly erotic and,superbly written.Trust me,if you don't like this then you should crawl back into your hole and die,you are obviously a meat head.More please.
I am loving this new storyline you've put up. I've loved pretty much all of your stories. Keep up the good work.
I found this story to be pretty hot and erotic but at the same time it also made me angry. I think if I found myself in this position I would flip my shit and bad things would happen to "Mark" while at the same time realizing that the girlfriend needed something that she wasn't getting from me. So either I step it up or part ways.
The fact that the story made me think so much on this tells me it was a good story.
We have too many WACC asshole writers in this catagory already
Hi, I really enjoyed the story and would appreciate a third part. Don't let us wait too long. Btw, forget about some stupid commends.
please stop writing, you truly suck at it. Your writing is pathetic at best.
So you will know where he lives so you can either set it on fire or wait until till he gets home so you can cave his skull in with claw hammer. What kind of silly shithead is this Mark?
More of this whore. The third story wasn't as good, but the first two were awesome. More face time, more picture messages. Maybe he reads her phone messages while she's away/asleep? Maybe the manager sends him a bunch of pics.
More slutty cheating shit!