by nighttimestories
Chapter one was a bit better than ok. But, chapter two was just crazy. However, both were good reading, but in my opinion I liked the second chapter a lot better but that's just me I guess. Good job on both of them.
Sorry, forgot to mention that I gave you 4 stars on your second chapter, it was well deserved.
The story was a turn on, the only detraction was the thought about disease hazard of drinking cum from random strangers. I know it's fantasy, but think it can contribute to normalising risk behaviour, especially for those who don't know the health implications.