All Comments on 'George and Shawna Ch. 02'

bareback sex with another man, then this lie about not being with the lover. She is a total deceitful lying slut. He needs to off her if he cant divorce her. And good old Glen needs to learn what cut and shoot means.

You can write the silliest shit. This one is of course "just plain bad", but like so many of your stories it is damned funny, unless one actually tries to take it seriously. You would get a zero on plot and story, but the laughs you gave me rate a 75. Thanks

This must be written totally from the woman's point of view. How else could there be any non-comical reality where the wife can go into detail with her husband about her affair, try to get him to reclaim her by flaunting her second betrayal right in his face in an extremely disgusting manner and still blame everything on him and justify her needing to make sure she had sexual partners available. This story had some possibilities, even including reconciliation until this second chapter. Now it is just more unrealistic garbage.

Their is somthing just plain wrong with that woman. Far more than her being a 'nympho' as her first partner said. The change in her actions are almost like she has compleatly flipped or somthing. You dont just suddenly start acting that way to your partner and children because you had drunken sex. To me their seems to be far more wrong with her than the standard wife in these kinda stories, they are usually off because they are 2d characters. Your wife here seems to have mental issues.

what planet is she from.she whoring and he should kiss her ass.get some balls bob.

I hope she cries herself to death. the entire situation is her fault, she has no control. being taken advantage of while drunk could have been forgivable, but her actions past that were not, esp. her actions and lies during the wakeup call. the kids would be better off if they just got divorced. hell, the husband would be better off. I plan on following this for a few more chapters to see what happens, but I hope that somehow her world ends up falling apart around her.

I am enjoying this "whorror" story build up. And with a JPB story ya never know if it's gonna be a sick assed wimp out, or a revenge, kick the slut to the curb, and get on with your life (albeit with some remorse) kind of a story.

....seems jpb's gonna have a helluva time jibing this boat away from wimp island-pistolpackinpete

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Go from here but I sure as hell will be watching for the next chapter to find out!

I'm enjoying it, but still can't get over how serious and boring so many of the readers are.

It's fiction for Christ's sake!

Thanks for the story

just divorce and each one take a daughter...that way no child support....maybe every 6 months just trade daughters.....that way each will have to figure out how to have someone watch the kids.....sell house and trade down in size and move to opposite sides of town or maybe even to another state ....that way the ywont see who the other has an affair with and their daughters will grow up without the bitterness... all the ywill have to put up with is not seeing their sister that much....maybe one have one and the other have the others during christmas and new years....that way they can both enjoy the holidays with each of the daughters...in this case this is the wives fault..totally and no way is he at fault.....when she started fucking kids in the backseat of cars she is now just a slut....so what if he has to fuck other sluts ....who wants to be married to one

Think about Shawna's actions and responses to a crisis that she ALONE caused. Why stayed married to someone like THAT!!?!??!!?

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The Problem is that Shawna keeps LYING about what happened. It is her sister that has to remind of the KEY points.

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the next moring she stayed and fucked the other guy 3 more times. There is NO defense for that. None. Marie: <i> "His problem is not that you were taken advantage of initially, but that you stayed and kept on doing it. You have to find a way to get passed that." </i>

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Shawna's solution to this probem is to

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<b>1) Blame George for being crushed. </b> George has no idea what happen or why and Shawna admits she has offerred NO explanation and defense

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<b>2) so since she really does love George she decides to go out and fuck lots of men THEN shawna decides to LIE about it. </b>

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Yet George is STILL hanging around. NO separation No seeing a lawyer. Gee I wonder why? If that isnt love...according to JPB... what is?

Your talents tend to surface when you begin to develop the story instead of your all too common quickies. This one is a better read, plus or minus minor plot defects.

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Dude, I can't possibly see how they can reconcile. Shawna need counceling like yesterday, hell both of them that!

Thanks and please continue. I hope they can get back together.

It is interesting and very well written and for that reason

I gave it five stars, but I am not sure if I can genuinely like it. I am more horrified. One thing, Shawna ought to listen to herself. She is saying that she was unsatisfied sexually and the only decent thing to do would be to ask for a divorce. She was super indecent with getting herself off on his cock after she had Glen put a creampie in it. Calling Marie to set up the backfire makes her positively evil. She does not deserve a good husband...

You've made her into a Complete Slut!--This story started out so good-But has gone down-hill in a FREFALL!

Shawna was obviously a frozen up pussy. She is the one to blame to make George seek something else. Most of the time the woman is to blame for the guy's wandering about, seeking new pussy to shoot his sperm into.

Great work Bob, I think you are handling the tale of a fallen wife a little better than me. You keep on dangling that piece of elastic that yo yos the two together then pulls them apart again.

I am intrigued to see how it all works out in the end. I can see both are dissatisfied already with the non committal sex. Will they bounce back together or will one or both find an alternative partner?

show that bitch its her fault that he doesnt want her sloppy seconds. i like how hes not taking it like a little bitch but i dont like how they are still together because since this isnt the last chapter, im dreading the next one because somehow i think you might have them get back together which would be retarded. and honestly, what the fuck man? she waits for 6 months but idt she tried to get a counselor just wait and hope george would take her back. and also, if she cant handle 6 months without sex then that says a lot about her and her ability to cheat. i hope to god they dont hook up again because they dont belong together, not after all shes done. and by that, i also mean when she gave her husband, who she desperately wanted back, glens sloppy seconds all the while saying how great a fuck he was and then leave the room.

Just Plain Bob is like a chain restaurant. You can always depend on a decent story, with decent characters. This one was one of the more interesting of his prolific output.

.....if he had mentioned what atrocious spellers readers were I could agree.But unfortunately he's 100% wrong.Other than HDK and a few others,I wouldn't even visit this site if it weren't for the hilarious comments.Serious comments? Don't think so Brit.Harry tries to be serious but it comes out as near hysteria! Great theater I'd say-pistolpackinpeteinnevertakeingthistooseriously

Good writing? Character development? Who the hell are you people? This is one in a long series of JPB POS. And in serial form no less! Quit Bob, quit.

Good writing? Character development? Who the hell are you people? This is one in a long series of JPB POS. And in serial form no less! Quit Bob, quit.

Good writing? Character development? Who the hell are you people? This is one in a long series of JPB POS. And in serial form no less! Quit Bob, quit.

Finish this, it's dragging now after a good start. Get his revenge on the whore, take the kids and the house and bury her at sea.

After the night she first cheated on her husband, why did she fuck the guy three times the next morning? Why did she let him fuck her while she talked to George on the phone? This has never been discussed, and there must be some reason for her to take a chance of throwing her marriage away. As for the life that they are trying to live,I think that they would become even more bitter towards each other as the weeks went by. Love that they had would turn into extreme hate.Thanks for the story, it makes my mind work trying to think what they would really do....Rich

the one of the main things has already been sugested. Shawana should get counseling for her affliction. Yes a drippy cunted weak minded slut whore needs a lot of phyvhological counseling...either that or decapitation. George shoule beat the shit out of Glen. It's writers like you that always let the other guy off no matter what he keeps doing when the wife says no. If more men acted like a real man then there would be less preditator men in the world. they would let their fear overcome thier horniness and the desire to fuck mud. That what Shawna is..mud...If a man would take a handfull of sofe warm mud an jack off it would feel just like a drippy cunted itchy slut to him...Hope yopu get some balls for George

(is that like some kind of retracted dick?)you making me feel sick. Do you have to give away your sexual tendencies and methods. You think MUD is the equivalent of a hot pussy??? You dirty, sad, fuckless little prick!

This story is really very complicated and I really don't know where both of them will go from here<p>The chances for reconciliation are very slim, its almost <i>impossible<i/><p/><p>What Shawna is now upto is nothing but suicide. She's dying a <b>Slow Death<b/> and this marriage is <b>OVER<b/>

This story is really very complicated and I really don't know where both of them will go from here<p>The chances for reconciliation are very slim, its almost <i>impossible<i/><p/><p>What Shawna is now upto is nothing but suicide. She's dying a <b>Slow Death<b/> and this marriage is <b>OVER<b/>

JPB has a knack of deleting and reposting stories. I thought this sounded familiar, and found it on storiesonline site. Four parts, and they get back together using the dofus' usual rationalize bullshit.

How can JPB write a line like this: "The first time you took advantage while I was drunk" ???

Why doesn't George recognize that Shawna was raped and why doesn't he go after Glen and settle the score. She on the other hand is a brainless twit ruled by her hormones. There is no suitable outcome for this tale.

Kelly Kelly wrote this

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<i> The chances for reconciliation are very slim, its almost impossible </i>

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wait until reas chapter 3 and 4... VOMITVILLE waits

If you read this story on another site, did you really have to share the ending with the rest of us?

That info wasn't necessary. Now that you stated your real reason for commenting, does it make you feel better? ML

To start, the second chapter went downhill from the first chapter, which I thought was excellent by the way. There really is a credibility issue. Others have raised the obvious points. No counseling, just living in the same house and pretending to get along for the sake of the two daughters, no expressions of love, and six or more months have passed. I really don't see the purpose of their staying together. I'm sure the daughters sense something fundamental is wrong -- it really can't be hidden from kids who are maturing (when parents are not in a loving relationship). Another reader who read this tale on SOL pointed out that there are a total of four parts, and eventually, George and Shawna reconcile. Interestingly, there is no mention of STD's -- I'm amazed but Glen's leavings don't give George the clap. I'm also amazed at how wimpy George acts throughout. And finally, George should have smelled Shawna's juices on his cock (transferred to his hand) and he would have known those juices were not KY but rather were really spunk juices. He could simply take some of her underwear and get a DNA test on it; it would demonstrate she is having multiple partner unprotected sex, a great way for a woman to get HIV. George could pretend to go away on business (hey, other stories use this old plot device, so why not this one?) and then "catch" Shawna having sex in their home with their daughters both in the room next door. I think a judge would take custody away from Shawna in such circumstances. I think a more likely ending (to reconciliation) would be a divorce, plain and simple, and I really think it should have happened already.

Did I <B><I>HAVE</b></i> to? No. Does it make me feel better? You bet your fucking ass it does. If this motherfucking asshole wants to post old stories and pretends it's new, if I can help one person from wasting any more time reading this drivel, then yes, it's worth it.

....you need to dig a little bit deeper.In lits jpb anthology there are only two chapts. listed.Only in stories online are all 4 chapts. posted,dated this year.JPB tends to try out his stuff on other sites(like dark wanderer) before subjecting them to us merciless critics on lit. But thanks for your concern,I don't know where we'd be without you-pistolpackinpetebeingrealnicelike

JPB like wimp story.

Yes, JPB may try out stories on other site, but what part of "JPB has a knack of deleting and reposting stories" was too difficult to understand. Of course you weren't going to find the other chapters here. If JPB has followed its usual MO, it deleted the entire story before starting reposting it. It's don't it before. Anyone who's been on this site for more than a few years would know that. Now, if you can find the listings from a few months to a year + ago (when the story appeared on storiesonline) you have a case, otherwise, uh uh.

Some people think they can figure it out for themselves

Some people can't afford or don't believe in counseling

As far as the Glen Jam, he believed the first story and he cleaned up. Her stupid story two days laters was at least two showers after the fact

She tries for 6 months and finally on the very day that he decides to have a talk she fucks again even though to prevent it all he needed to do was call her on her cell phone. That could never happen so I gave it 2** instead of 5*****.

Same old stuff, chapter after chapter. He needs to kick her out or she needs to leave. The kids will recover, they already know, anyway IMO. I will try the next chapter, if nothing changes I will just go away. I, of course, did not mark you down.

typical weak story about cheating..oh wait plot twist the guy's just not gonna do anything...JPB turn in your guy badge and take chick writer wimp walk of shame he could have something lawyer, detective,spit.maybe next.... hahaha sorry forgot where i was.

Cause someone else wants in it. In my mind I can a boat in a big lake with two people in it but only one comes back.

Why all the characters are wimps, you think one healthy man can handle this situasion this way.

challenge accepted, TK U MLJ LV NV

please don't give us a load of RAAC. My first wife suggested we live together as housemates. I don't know if she would really have done that. I could not, but we didn't have kids who were at home full time. I see the last chapter got very good ratings, so JPB didn't piss off his readers. I wonder how he managed that?

Sometimes you have to do things that will effect the kids. Her ass should have been tossed out the door the second he found out. Why live in hell?

It was bad enough that she went out, making it obvious she intended to get fucked, but then to come home and essentially RAPE him with he sloppy cunt is unforgivable.

And then to try to make believe it was all fake, and to use his sister in the bargain? She's worse than a whore! And then, with her ploy actually working, she goes out and fucks up AGAIN!

1. Absolutely no RAAC! (But I fear he'll eventually determine they are even, except for #2 below.)

2. Why wasn't our hero smart enough to ask his sister what time she met wifey at the Hilton?

Probably no coming back from all this cheating. Maybe a good psychologist might help them, but no way does this end in anything but divorce without professional help. Of course if she gets pregnant or either one of them picks up some nasty disease all bets are off. This is a train wreck looking for a good place to happen. Drive that train Bob,then pick a good place to wreck it.

Shawna isn't worth shit

This story arc is I think some of JPB's best work. For me, it contains more emotion than a lot of his other stuff. It really bugs me that Shawna lied about having been fucked, and even enlisted George's sister to cover for her. This was a sick level of manipulation. Her indignation pissed me off.

Shawna is totally without sympathy.

She should have gotten counseling or therapy instead of continuing destructive behavior.

She is without redemption and worthy of nothing but pain for destroying her family.

Still a fucking wimp! This bullshit about "staying together for the kids" is pure BULLSHIT! Kick the slut to the curb and be done with her, but NO! You'll drag this out with more wimpish bullshit!

Two more repellent persons are hard to imagine.

The way the’re going about providing a safe and secure home life for their kids, is the dumbest thing I’ve ever heard. If the kids can cook dinner, they’re old enough to smell bullshit. Just toss her out!

Is this the only plot device that 95% of LW can come up with to write a story?

She is one low life whore. Please don't have him take her back.

I trailed the mouse over 4 to five stars and it registered a 4. Sorry Bob. This chapter was good.

Again it's George and not Shawna who's responsible for the breakdown of the marriage. He should have forgiven his wife's first indiscretion quickly and taken her back like a REAL man. Like something Kalimaxos would do.

Gooooood plot.....

Whore destroys marriage by being a total white.

White gets mad because it's taking a long time for her faithful husband to work through it and goes back to whoring with the same asshole and literally rubs the other man's cum in the face of the man she "loves", thus destroying her marriage further.

He gets her back, finally, and she is so petty that she lies about it and goes out and whores again to come home to a thoroughly betrayed husband that wanted to try to work it out with the whore but she just won't stop being a deranged whore.

Not even close to sane.

HDK is one of my favorite writers here . But if He takes her back then the Cucks will be happy . I would have kicked her to the curb

First of all, before she decided to give Glen a second go, what he was doing was classic sexual harassment.

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Second, her lie about Marie was despicable.

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They really should just end things.

I think that you should show George how Shawna lied to him again and did fuck her co worker again and lied to his sister about it also just so she would have an albi and if Shawna really loved her husband as she said she did then she should have had Glen arrested for rape because she did tell him no at the beginning and no means no

Oh for gods sake - put s bullet in me …. This is a drawn out mess ….

George is just the latest in the long line of immature LW man boys who can't talk and who just wants to suffer and play the victim card ad nauseum. Either fish or cut bait, dude, but grow a pair and actually do something besides feel sorry for yourself. It gets so damn boring.

Should’ve had the wife arrested for sexual assault and rape. She initiated sexual activity without his consent, and exposed him to another man’s fluids, which could give him a STD.

Women need to be held accountable for their choices, instead of being treated like children!

ZK