All Comments on 'Give Some, Take Cum'

I like the detail, great job with describing all the hot action.. I especially liked Penny getting pawed by the other chick, that was a nice surprise.. Keep it going!!!

All the way up to Beth finishing cleaning Penny was super hot, but all the unanswered questions at the end kinda killed my buzz and now I'm just suspicious of those two.

Very hot!

I could not overcome the considerable inconsistency

of Beth having such a voracious appetite for cum,

and yet being so unwilling to do what it takes to get it straight from her boyfriend's cock that she calls on an almost-stranger to get it for her.

Even assuming her quirk (which I cannot, in my mind),

she could have given him a handjob,

or he could have stroked himself into her mouth.

So, since the very quirk on which the story depended, seemed unreal, the story itself lacked viability, making me unable to relate to it.

The fancy word is that it lacked verisimilitude.

Paul in Oklahoma