All Comments on 'Going Legit'

no wonder women --- 3 marriages to three women --- simply want his money and not his brains or body. this man is a total moron. look at how he talks in a lounge! <p>

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""" She and her girlfriends lived outside of Pittsburgh, Pennsylvania and were there for a four day vacation. This was her first day and she wasn't sure where to go or what to do. <p>

I mentioned the company I was here to troubleshoot for, and how I traveled all the time. She was excited to hear about the places I had been. I didn't tell her I owned the company or could afford to buy the lounge we were sitting in. """ <p>

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what a complete fuckin' moron character you've created, DG Hear! and you had this idiotic character bitch that all women wanted was his money? but the second thing, after his name, that he brags about is how rich he is and what a big business owner he is! LOLLLLLLLLLLLLLLL

ending. The drama introdused was a rape, a couple of murders which in itself was not important to the story. Well told though.

Thanks DG for another exceptionally well-written story – I always look forward to a new one from the Master! Its tales like this which make up for the crap so often seen at Literotica. There are so few really great writers on this site but you, DG, are certainly one of them! What can I say, a big hearted mobster going legitimate but still solving problems the old fashioned way? Full marks - no suggestions for improvement - to me it was perfect! A devoted fan, Pete.

The story had an artificality about it. The hero's? language seemed unnatural. Somewhat disappointing from one of my favorite authors.

we all have our own favorite stories, this is one of mine , it may not have been perfect but it was one of the better!

a comment was made about him with 3 strikes , well i have found when looking for love ,we do see thru rose colored glasses and make mistakes, major mistakes, he was one of the fortunite few that found his soul mate, lucky couple , and for those of us, it nice to see that it still can happen whether fact or fiction , so see this story for what it is, a story with a happy ending, we need more of those in our lives.

i'll get off my soap box now and look forward to your next submission

Contrived and two-dimensional characters with a plot as thin and unbelievable as you have ever written. The overweening egotism of the main character means that all others are relegated to walk-on parts. Not up to your normal standards, sorry.

I really loved this story for a lot of reasons. I loved the characters, the realism. Just the idea that not everyone lives a perfect life. Yes there were some bad things in the story but thats what makes it dramatic and interesting. It could have more sex in it though :)

It's fantasy folks. It was a sweet little romance, with the girl getting a guy who loves her 100%. I'm not for violence in real life, but the fictional bad guys got "disappeared" and I'm fine with it.

one fo the best erotic stories i have ever read. jerry becoming a friend was outstanding paragraphs, the quick but true love of dawn well done, the determination to do future business through julie's firm fair indeed.

i cannot praise the story enough. there is some happiness, in the written world at least

thank you for your story!!

I enjoyed the tale. It was a good story and ending. Thanks for your time.

Not quite as twisted and obscure as usual, but

I enjoyed it. As always well written.

You know DG you are going to end up convincing me that

you come from the dark side!

Thank you all for the feedback and comments. I write what I feel and what I would do in the situation of the characters. People aren't perfect and I try to use life's knowledge to prove it in my stories.

I leave comments open so you the reader can voice an opinion. All I ask is that you be fair and honest in your voting. Not all stories end the way we would like or follow the path we would have chosen. Please remember it is just a story.

Thank you for reading and commenting on my stories. I really do appreciate it.

With respect

DG Hear

This story by DG Hear is excellent. And it has a very happy ending. Keep on Writing DG Hear! RAG

Another five, as usual. Others have mentioned that it's nice to see some happiness in life, even in Lit life. I'll second that. Thanks for writing. Phil

Good characters, good emotions ... good story!

Regards, Jack

For some reason it seemed rather complicated, so much so it colored the happy ending for me.. But I did enjoy the story.. The happy ending did make the story for me!! Love happy endings.. Story was a good read; it kept me up late!!

Well done DG thank you for the entertainment.<P>PT

Nice, no stupid melodrama.

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"I'm gonna make him an offer, he can't refuse." I really wish you could have squeezed that line in there somewhere! Great tale!

You do not fuck with a man's family - period -

If the man has lot of money you do not want to even look like you are fucking with his family LOL

Title above says it all.

and building a bridge in Pennsylvania is perfectly legit for a guy in the construction business.

It is interesting how this story keeps coming back around every five years or so.

It's always a great ending when the asshokes get whats coming to them in the end. For those of you who figure the penalty was too high, figure drugging and kidnapping 2 women, rape of one of the women, blackmail and extortion, attempted rape of the other woman, and possession of illegal drugs. Jerry just bypassed all the lawyers, judges, trial and jury time and went to the sentencing. For those of you who don't agree, what if it was your wife and sister who were the 2 women? Would you be any less judgmental.

the two scum bags got what was coming to them for raping women...but they got to be what they wanted to be....now they are "pillars" of society......

It wasn't well written. You could do better! Yes, people aren't perfect and that's what you wanted to show in your protagonists but the story line wasn't well put

Also there's no real depth to your characters. It was way too flat. Emotions weren't eloquently expressed and it didn't evoke any warm feelings you get after reading a good romance story.

Nicely written. There were a few errors but over all it's nicely written. I especially liked how you put in the whole Yugoslavia part. Rob's full last name is Croatian. Croatia is one of the five countries that made up Yugoslavia before it split up. Yugoslavia doesn't have Serbian heritage but all different countries and ethnic backgrounds. You honestly don't want to know how I know that.

Great story...5*

A masterpiece. Two sets of 5 stars back to back. I loved the weaving of the plot and the results of Jerry's intervention and final solution. You think his solution was too harsh? How would you feel if the women were your wife. your mother, your sister?

BJ

Great story, lots of romance, drama and suspense. Story was well written and had great characters. Love the end where Rob rescues Dawn just in the nick of time along with getting all of the pictures back of the attempted rape and Julie's rape. As for Justin and Todd, them ending up in the concrete pour of bridge abutment is what happens to someone who messes with the wrong persons woman. Well Done, 5++stars

Julie was on great fault, thats my thought

Loved the story. There are some people who deserve to be buried in foundations of buildings or under road roads etc. Thank you for another great story. Mel B known as Hornydevil47.

DGHear is a super writer. This was a top notch Romance about two people who were looking for the right thing and found each other. 5/5

THC

If he knew his three marriages wouldn't work,why did he get married?.

MC WAS SO GOOD WITH PEOPLE THAT'S WHY HE DIVORCE 3 TIMES AND WASN'T SO GOOD AT SEEING SKANKS AFTER HIS MONEY!! LOSER

Great story, much to do with friends and relatives too. Good job and I really enjoy this author.