by Miss Jane
Very amusing. Though I would make a suggestion for future stories. It would be nice to give crooked interpretations to innocent lines in the poem - For eg.,
Heat was in the very sod which the saint had printed.
becomes the king spreading warmth and seed to the maidens desolate for their husbands are away at war.
But nice work, carefully done.
Fantastic job and well written. I loved every word. Good luck in the contest.
well thought out and conceived...good luck in the contest!
I loved your take and twist on this. One of my favorite Christmas carols (without which we probably never would have remembered good old king Wenceslas!) I might not have used common slang/vernacular (pussy/cock) in a period piece, but otherwise, really enjoyed it.
Just as good as all the comments say it is. All your stories are so erotic and sensual.
So creative... A pleasure to read.
Best of luck in the contest!!
This is a well-written romantic tale set in the past, which gives it a special mood and makes it a delight to read. Written in the classic third person past tense style, it draws the reader into a charming world of long ago. The romantic scenes are too few and too brief when compared to the plot, but apart from that this is a fine story. However, it should have been categorized in Romance, and not in Erotic Couplings.