All Comments on 'Hannah and Mike Ch. 02'

What a great story. Good slow lead in, that helps to make it all believable. I look forward to the guy getting his release.

I'M GOING CRAZY WAITING FOR THESE TWO TO START DEVOURING ONE ANOTHER . YOU SURE DO KNOW HOW TO BUILD THE TENSION .WELL DONE!

What a great way to build up the story - you have a real gift.

I appreciate the comments everyone. I finished the third chapter last night and submitted it. It's what we've all been waiting for so be sure to check back. Should be up on Friday or Saturday.

Great sexual tension.

Keep it going.

A nice, slow, and natural build up. Good writing, although you might want edit before submission. That would help us readers.

I swear to god, your next (god I hope not last) chapter had better be fucking EPIC. I'm about to burst over here!

There are more than one guy about to burst!! Please, DO NOT stop at 3 either...this is GOOD!

i wish these writers would either properly proof read or use a good editor these stories get painful to try and decode the stupid errors. a 1/10 for sloppy writing.

"Yeah I thought I'd keep it in the dark and come home and surprise everyone at once. I figured you and Dad would be home on a Saturday," I told her as we hugged. I was keeping my waist as far away as possible to hide my bulge.

@@@ I always laugh and shake my head when I read these setups... Realistically, unless the guy is wearing warmups, or loose slacks and boxers (or commando;) then nobody would even notice that a guy has a woody unless he has a short shirt and they're looking down! I've hugged my fair share of people with a woody when I was younger and unless you are grinding on them, they never know. Makes for a good plot piece though, hehe. @@@

Hannah let me bring her off in the middle of the beach and teased me mercifully, and all I could do was nod. We gathered our stuff and walked back to the Jeep. I had to ride back with a towel in my lap to hide my erection from all the passing cars.

@@@ 'teased me mercifully' hehe, not much mercy there ;) ...and I guess there aren't any doors on the jeep! Nothing like a girl in a miniskirt driving a jeep with no doors! Hehe! @@@

Mmmm can't wait to read the next chapter!! Best part is my name is Mike so it reads soooo much better!! ;)