All Comments on 'He was thinking about marrying her'

He lucked out, big time!

Maybe just another paragraph or two about his response, her getting dressed and walking out the door. Or maybe one for the road, a couple of tears, and parting.

But at least a goodbye! And his emotional state after he processed for few minutes.

. . . that this story is unfinished. I did have more, in which Sgt O”Neal went to Confession, and then Lauren’s husband had him brought up on adultery charges under the UCMJ, but those didn’t stick because he didn’t know she was married.

But that part just didn’t flow well, and was really an anticlimax, so I left it out.

Or maybe I should say “poor guys”. I’ll bet next time he asks if they’re married first ‘cause he seems like a decent sort. Let’s just hope this Dave isn’t like Vandemoniums Dave characters!

Theres more emotional tension in doing the dishes

Does not re-up, or there will be many more deployments. Unless he finds out from some kind soul or sees the videos you have uploaded on the internet, while he is browsing in Incirlik. Then when she comes back, you can ignore her calls, texts and knocking on your door

should be a part 2 to where he tells the husband he has an unfaithful wife

Thought this was going somewhere good , and then it was over .

Got to say I am beginning to get fed up with authors writing stories and leaving it up to the readers to imagine their own endings .

It might be the modern way now ,but it's not clever or classy ..... if you cannot be bothered to finish it then don't start it !!

Rant over , what was there was good . Two more pages would have been brilliant .

I leave fragment of review for fragment of story

Premise good

Where rest?

"I don't think you'd have taken up with me if you'd known I was married"

Probably because Frank was a nice guy and wouldn't dream of screwing another man's wife. Frank needs to have a chat with her husband and let him know what kind of woman he's married to.

Man...I love you're writing. But what's up with the short stories lately. Thin plot, no character development. Still give you 5. But this had the makings of an epic.

Not a good way to end.

He should have been named Jody.

Another long time author that's becoming easy to ignore. Too bad, he's written some decent stuff in the past. He will of course delete this comment right away, because that's what Reed Richards does.

Come back when you write a whole story.

1*

"it would at least be with just the one guy." - I don't know if that's better or not. A guy a week for five weeks is definitely slutty, which would be worse, but one guy over five weeks is obviously a relationship, which certainly COULD have been worse if she didn't at least have the strength to end it.

I agree with Anonymous (Seems Unfinished). They need a much longer discussion. I guess the moral is: If you marry an oversexed sexpot, don't leave her alone for 13 months! 12 months, okay, but not 13! 5*, and I'd love a sequel.

vignette. Deserves a better score.

Send the pictures to her husband with an apology. The husband needs to know his wife is a whore before she gives him an STD or hurts his career. No military man wants to be Jody. She is a liar and deserves to go down.

Not too uncommon in Hampton Roads. A local TV station shows spouses meeting naval ships returning from deployment. If you want to see guilty faces!

WELL! Damm!!! Please continue this story...ideas?

1. His POV on her announcement

2. Life afterwards

3.Seeing her with hubby on base or in the town

4. She sets him up with someone else after another go at him as an apology

shallowness. The plots are insubstantial, the settings and setups are kind of random and pointless, and the characters are paper thin. And that might be your writing MO, and if so, congratulations. You nail it almost every time. But from this reader's perspective its like random variations of bennie weenies.

Sure you mix up the beans and the weenies, try different sauces and flavors, but basically its very very similar. And I like beenie weenies. But they're more of a snack than a meal.

So here we have a guy contemplating marriage, and he doesn't even know the prospective partner's age? What's her background, education, family situation, career, interests, hobbies, talents, plans, goals, morality and ethics? You know, the sort of things you would want to know before you entered a business partnership with someone you met 6 weeks ago. And all he really knows is that she's attractive and a great fuck, so why not marry her? And I have the uncomfortable feeling that you think this is normal, or at least typical, for how marriages originate. And looking at the divorce rate you may be right.

You really seal the shallowness when the asshole doesn't seem to care that this whore is fucking over a fellow service member, out risking his life for his country. And you make it obvious that if he had met this cheater earlier in her husband's deployment she might actually have fallen in love with him and divorced her husband for this tissue paper poltroon. And we all know that its probably just a matter of time before she cheats again, and another trusting dumb shit finds out too late that he's raising another man's children and wasted most of his life on a worthless whore. And this asshole could have saved him from that if he had the balls. But he doesn't.

Having balls requires courage, insight, and depth. All this guy has are some useless beenies and a weenie with no brain, or conscience.

Snack time.

But thanks for the effort.

Good story a fun read. Hey the sarge is a lifer and not a newbie, he'll pull up his pants and get on with his life. Sounds like he made out pretty good and shouldn't have any regrets.

too stupid for me. dumbass didn't even know how old she was and wanted to marry her. i hope our real service men/women are smarter than that. also didn't really feel like a story to me. more like an essay of what not to do

In the old days one needed your CO's permission to marry. Absence makes the heart grow fonder - of somebody else. Sorry but it is the truth. She strayed but she was going back, she loved her husband and that is the truth. I know we are all sanctimonious today but my grand parents talked about the agreements they had with other couples, he flew B-17 in Europe then B-26 Marauders in Asia and was one of the handful who did that and survived. The group of couples shared wives and husbands so that if one was lost, someone could take up the slack and take care of each other. They used the sexual bond to share their pain and fears. The women often slept together. Modern swinger life style came from this world, not often talked about but it is true. They lost lots of friends, took care of lost of wives and children, fostered some whose mothers lost the battle with depression. My grand parents raised 11 children in total, four of their own. Judge less, forgive more and learn that the wives of our military also serve and fear and love and have needs.

Since this is about the guy she cheated with, I’m happy with it ending here. I found it interesting that you had her lasting so long being faithful (about a year) and not finally straying until her husband was almost returning.

I thought maybe the husband comes home, confesses to his wife of his infidelities abroad, she confesses hers, husband gets turned on and the three of them start playing together.

It did sound like love made in heaven. If her husband is that good then she came out ahead.

A LOOONNGG time ago, close on 30+years ago... met a BABE hardbody... absofuckinglootly gorgeous. Super sweet. WANTED her to marry me.... and she said her husband was coming back from an unaccompanied in Korea. And an air force wife at that! Guess I dodged a bullet. She did it to him, she'd have done it to me. But damn, I was heartbroken.

Immediately

Good start but incomplete story.

So where’s the rest of the story. A cheating wife who gets a guy to love then ends it to go back to her husband. The husband deserves to know!

I'll admit to giving a lower score. My thoughts are based on this being unfinished. If she was just a cheating whore until her husband came home..the end. then I'm justified. usually I'll wait to see if there is a part two, I just have a feeling with this one that this was the story. :0/

Cheating whore's confession makes you want to find a woman to marry doesn't it? She'll surly cheat on you next deployment.

I have to say I'm split on this one. First, I feel that it was unfinished. But if I took it the way it is, I would have to say, no Jody would not be his name. A Jody is someone who knows she is married and does it anyway, Frank didn't know. I would like to believe he took the high road, let her go and then forgot about her. If her husband is going to find out let it be from someone else.

Reed, I didn't like your maybe that you left off and I'm glad you did. I will wait for a better story from you.

What a skank!

I guess we're to think that everything is hunky dory and they go back to their old life and live happily ever after. Much too short.

NOW he has a bullseye on his ass.

Story Is Done

This story is finished and complete as is. It is quite good.

They'll Meet Again

I just know it, they will surely meet again. She has tasted the forbidden fruit, and fuck is he ever hooked.

Thanks for a story that has happened too often in real life.

Disappointed. No ending

Reed writes very well, relating stories from his vision of everyday life. In my reality, Lauren's combat hardened pararescue husband or his war buddies find out about REMF Sgt Weatherman's courtship of Lauren. Not realizing that he is also a hapless victim of the lying, cheating dependa wife, he is badly injured in a drive by beating. His injuries cause him to be medically discharged from the service. Lauren ends up divorced with half of nothing , our trolling for her another naive serviceman. Maybe she can slide over to Little Creek and catch a Seal. Sammie seems pretty simple. Fred's story does happen, probably very frequently. But I think my version happens too. My experience points that way. Another good, not very happy story from Reed.

Short but well written. A good opening sequence if you had somewhere to go with it. You've got the boy gets girl - boy loses girl parts. Now, how does he get her back? Or does he?

Emotionally disconcerting, but well written.

Does it bother any of the regular readers that the social fabric that we rely upon to set a background in our lives seems to be unraveling?

Smokepole

Perhaps, but that would be expected. after all she was left alone for 13 months. Not her fault entirely. If you marry before going into or while in the service you should know what could happen.

Story seems unfinished to me. 2/5

I don’t know if I’ll publish the second chapter; I’ve started it but I’m not happy with how it’s progressed. I have Dave as a captain, running a computer office, but not particularly a tech wizard himself. He’s as much of a REMF as Frank. The second chapter, written in third person, concerns Lauren’s plans to keep Dave from finding out about Frank.

One of the persistent themes in LW is that the husband finds out that his wife had an affair, but let’s face facts: many times cheated on spouses do not ever discover the truth. The chapter goes into a Lauren’s thinking, but, as I said, while I know what I’d put in the chapter, I’m not happy with my prose so far.

She comes across as a bitch just using him while hubby is away and a slut fucking around on her hubby. "I was missing cock" really isn't a great excuse, maybe there was more to it, but the issue with flash is you can't delve or develop.

reed, i think you have a great story that leaves the readers hanging. why not do a chapter 2?

Please continue with Your story. My wishful thinking comes from my own personal feelings. I can't write myself, so I read the good stories posted by others. I don't always like your stories, but I've read them all. I read the next one too.

Please tell us there is btb to follow.

You. Not her.

She didn’t tease at all!

In service and getting serious about her and didn't ask questions?

Guilty!

Hard corps USMC Vietnam vet

He didn't know it but as soon as she told him, he should have thrown her out not try to keep it going. Lauren should be outed to her husband so he can find a better woman.

The Sovran has been Bank of America for a over a decade now, closer to two. If this had been written in 2004, no problem. That it was 2020, you should probably have referenced that that it was a reminiscence. I also think The Bar has changed it's name, though I haven't been over that way but once in the last four or so years.

Still, love it when you talk about HR and the Peninsula.

I think all wives cheat. Too bad more don't get burned!!!

@Scorpio, I don't see Frank try to keep it going.

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@RR, no, you don't need a big deal continuation, but the ending just petered out.

The story was really good up to the end, it has no closure , as if it set the stage for another chapter or continuation of some kind . I can’t speak for other readers but I like knowing how things pan out for characters, especially when thrown a game changing curve ball like this one did ! It leaves too many open ends ! But it sure started good and strong building to the crescendo but then just climaxed without letting me finish , then hopped off lit a cigarette and asked , “ it was good for me was it good for you?”

Too abrupt of an ending to give it a high score. Not saying the wife needed burned but there needed to be some consequences, some ending of some sort.

1 star - pathetic ending - no ending really - just sad.

Good story short and well written

The build up was obvious.

i'm confused. Did you just get tired of writing and decide to post or were you trying to make a statement and not write a composition/essay.

You are much to talented to put this out without developing a story to the story line. You went a quarter of the way into the story and just dropped it.

I realize this is a two year old story and I just found it, but, damn Reed, this is really disappointing coming from you.

Please write for us again. I love your work-most of the time.

Doc

Damn! I dislike heating married sluts.

Having read so many cheating slut stories in “loving wives” I feel total empathy for the husband who was cucked. 2 stars is dislike that’s it.

Bill S.

I have been used before, all the way till the big slam dunk let down in this similar manner. In this situation I would not lose her number, in fact I would be looking for a way to hurt her as bad as she did me, by telling her husband about us. Of course he would become collateral damage, but he does deserve to know. I know I would want to know, no matter how much it hurts. But she does deserve some kind of payback for her double deception.

1 star - as an air force veteran, I witnessed way too many similar situations. Thankfully, not nearly as bad, nor as long, nor as frequent as the grunts and polly-wogs. Especially, boat guys who are on ship anywhere for months. I'd say the divorce rate was at least 75% or more, among the enlisted ranks and there were a lot of couples who did not care at all.

2nd read; this story hurt as it really hits home, except for me it was San Diego WestPAC widows who use and dump good sailors/marines.

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These bitches need to burn in hell play us like that. Nearly the same thing happen to me, twice, and the 2nd time I was sure she was not using me. I even asked her if she was married only to find out 6mo later she lied and her husband was a LT flyboy and I just a surface PO1.... No ring shadows or indents and still got fraud-ed and used. I even bought an engagement ring too.

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Sure he could seek out her husband and tell him, butttttt....

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2** hooyah but no salutes...

Epilogue: What Lauren didn't know was Frank had some hot pics of the two of them. He blurred out his face and sent them to Lauren's husband. He kicked her ass to the curb so fast it made her head spin. She showed up at Frank's door looking sad and defeated. He invited her in and asked her what happened. When she was done talking, but still crying, he laughed. "You stupid empty headed cheating skank slut. Who do you think sent your husband those pictures? Get out of my house whore, and don't ever come back!" Lauren fled the house weeping running to nobody in particular, because now she had what she deserved... no one!

I feel as if there’s a lot more story to this story. The end was abrupt. I hope you continue with it, as it seemed like a good start.

What I find amazing is that in real life, women can be so completely selfless, nurturing and loving on one hand (typically with their children) and at the very same moment in time so completely selfish, self absorbed and heartless (typically with their spouses). It's like Dr. Jekyll and Mr. Hyde in reality, but even worse.

Don't like stories where the bad guy suffers no consequences.

I liked the whole storyline but this could be a reality as some comments have stated. Sad for him and hated her for leading him on. She could have been honest but choose to cheat on her clueless husband, making him a cuck. Frank needs to let her husband know what kind of wife he has, time to man up and get a bit of payback... As others have mentioned, this was too abrupt an end and another chapter could be added to show the fallout

Yeah shame on her but the story was so damn funny. Poor bastards. One has what he thinks is a great wife and the other one had what he thought was going to be a great wife and then it turned into a big WTF??? I guarantee you the main character, in the future, is going to be telling the story and laughing at himself for being such a dumbass.

Hopefully when Dave gets home he tells his slut wife one of his friends had kept him informed of her new boyfriend. He was just passing through to get all his stuff out of the house and that the process server would be by later.

In reply to "Don't like stories". Did you even read it? There is no "bad guy".