by jonthechaosman
I agree about the ending. I was running out of time for the contest entry. I will revisit the couple at times in other stories. 4 out of the 5 characters are from a series even though this one stands alone.
Rushed ending... you entered this into the competition... it was great up to the end where it was abruptly rushed. Kind of ruined it.
Still a good yarn with a happy ending...I like those!!!!
i agree with everyone about the ending but the story is kin of warm and fuzzy in a way...lol
Well that was a quickie! Dang; akin to those dates that sucked! Expect a full night of passion, and find a dud. I want to rate you highly, but I feel so...deflated!
Scratch off the last paragraphs or so, or better yet, copy paste it to a new page and name it part 2!
they can give rise to new ones....TK U MLJ LV NV