All Comments on 'Heat'

overall I think that this was a good start to your story. It all started off from a great idea. To make the story better, I think you could try to like make it longer and explain just exactly what they are doing. For example: explain their exact movements, their feelings, their sounds, their words, the thrusts, their climaxes, ect., ect. In my opinion this was a cute story but ppl on here look for mostly stuff that will make them want to be fucked and that Will turn them on completley. They want more if the fully erotic story type. Keep trying:) thanks

I liked it, and your humor. Just quiet and nice. They don't all have to be explosive. That would be/is boring. Thanks for the entertainment.

I liked it, and your humor. Just quiet and nice. They don't all have to be explosive. That would be/is boring. Thanks for the entertainment.