All Comments on 'Hidden Beauty'

This is one of the best stories I have read on this site period. I am always looking for a story that has many elements to it. What I loved the most was that both of the main characters had blemishes (they weren't perfect). Yes I know that there are stories with buxom characters, but these two ladies had things that actually made people turn away from them. I also liked the superhero aspect in the story. I also really enjoyed how you intertwined both the soft, sensual lovemaking and the lust-filled, semi-rough sex.

I would love to see this story continue on.

Becky

Great Story, I love the way you developed the characters.

Keep up the great work.

Fantastic, amazing, sweet, sensuous, hot, brilliant, clever, hot, intriguing, beautiful, I already mentioned hot right?

None of these words are adequate but they're all I have. Another truly blinding story, thank you.

xx

great story...amazing...and im so happy that you've got back... :)

I noticed that your last couple of stories people kept saying that they felt rush at the end ... I've not felt that at all but this last one is truly beautiful and brilliant.

Loved the depth of the characters, the build up and how great the characters are together. And LiveCat was 100% correct about the hotness.

Your work is wonderful as ever and I hope to see much more of it. My thanks for sharing.

IDB.

Oh... my... God... :-D

Omg! I am not a lesbian but this story is so hot it makes you want to be one! Lol. Loved this story!!!

your blending of the main characters with the fictional characters in the "story" Kadan was "working" on is excellent, and you carried it off with percission and grace---Well Done!

That deserves more than 5 stars ! Please continue

Excellent piece of work!

a deep & sensitive love story of two people... simply lovely!!

I always loved your stories. This one is also a master piece. Loved the super hero comic narration as well. No wonder it's second highest rated story after few days of a post.

5 stars for sure.

- C.K.

So very good!

Thanks for sharing !!!

I hope real life slows down enough for you to be able to put pen to paper again.

Warm Regards...

I\W

thank you for gifting us with another fabulous piece if creativity. so beautifully written , it always flowed so gracefully. the characters were so perfect in their own way, their differences not an issue, but part of what made them special. they worked so well together. every emotion so well developed. and did I mention HOT! so sensual and erotic, passionate and tender.

I am so happy you are writing again.

jan

That story is WHY people read on this site. Hot, completely real, well written, and incredibly sexy from start to finish. Master of your craft. Kudos!

So glad you are back to writing. I just love your stories. This was a great read.

Awesome story! My fav kind are the long detailed ones ;-) So please please please find time to write more.

You're back. Great story has always. Any chance of a Squeal to Bloodline or An Empath's Detective.

Alex, I want to join with the rest of your fans in thanking you for returning to Literotica with such wonderful stories. Your writing is superb and your stories imaginative.

We all hope for many more years of creative output from you.

superb it`s worth reading for.{cinder}

more chapters please.

As always your stories are perfect! I love that it was a mutual attraction that both women were afraid to act on. Then you opened the door with Jess crying. Great character development and just wonderful message of two beautiful people. A perfect example of two beautiful human beings! Thanks a million for the great read!

You have been missed and this story was excellent!!! Looking forward to more great stories from you!

I really like that both heroines are strong, rather than the more femme one needing to be rescued. Great story! I would love to see you work with a Literotica editor to eliminate the numerous examples of passive voice, which reduce the energy and focus of the work.

really great story, i love it, thanks!

The author's talent is apparent in the way this story unfolds. The plot is awesome, the background settings, strength of the characters and subsequent ending, blend together perfectly thereby creating a beautiful love story. Loved it!!

This story was amazing! I couldn't stop smiling :)

Well done a fantastic build up and it kept me reading hard to stop please write more

Really imaginative, nice simple development of the characters. I'd like to see some work on a more unique writing style, just to see that personality of yours come out more on paper, and some spelling mistakes, but great job nonetheless.

I can see you've really put some thought into the story. :)

I read this story before and enjoyed it, reading it again I enjoyed it even more. I like your style and characterisation, keep writing, will look for more of your stories

Very well written story. Somehow I wish there was more, maybe one day.

Nice simple development of the characters. I'd like to see more when will you write chapter two, could not stop reading

A truly wonderful story. I love the character development, the interplay between the characters, even the settings for the various scenes. Your attention to detail and well developed writing style make the story enjoyable and captivating, allowing us to suspend reality for just a little while. Please continue to write. You are a gifted authoress.

very creative, and you character development skills are impressive (also i love superheroes). I hope to see more from you

A great story in so many ways, Alex. Nothing more to be said. I rest my case.

Wow, this one has a plot - a rarity in these boring times.

Thanksies for the good stuff.

Just awesome plot and characters. Just a little pointer- I think the word 'infamous' is used in negative sense.

I could not stop reading! I absolutely loved this story and it was truly well written. It had me trapped in and I couldn't get enough!

This is the second time I have read this story. I admit I enjoyed it as much this time as I had the first time. Wonderfully written story.

Kaden has "complete heterochromia iridis" which she describes as scary.

Isn't that just having eyes of two different colors? How scary is that?

As always your stories are AMAZING!!!!!!

truly great story, which i enjoyed very much

This is my third time reading it and it puts a smile on my face every time.

I have never replied to a story. This was phenomenal. You are a great writer. I truly enjoyed this story.

Encouraging how you

Blended the 2 stories together.

Wonderful story :) Loved both characters

Beautiful story! Thank you.

Such a great story...love, sex, romance.

Just wow.

.ABSOLUTELY LOVE IT!

This is so good, you're an amazing writer

must read more of your stories

You're story was amazing...hope you write more and continue their journey

Really enjoyed it....

All I can say is ... THIS IS FREAKING AMAZING!!! ... Wow! This is the kind of story I'm going to read over and over again ... If you post this on Wattpad, this is gonna be a big hit! I love the story ... Beautiful plot ... Great characters... I'm giving you a two thumbs up with a big smile .. Good job!

I'm totally drawn into this ... So beautiful

This is the 6th time I've came back to read this story! I love it and want to rate it 10!! But PLEASE PLEASE CONTINUE IT!!!

I love the premise and theme of the story - what some see as a flaw is another's perception of beauty. Being physically attractive, whether male or female is overrated. Don't get me wrong, it's nice but there are far more important things like being kind, considerate, supportive, and a good communicator, that makes a person beautiful. Moreover, these characteristics are more desirable when considering a partner or friend. I think the story is a gentle reminder to not judge a book by its "ratty" or torn cover. There could be something valuable and good inside.

D really z great. Hv really enjoyed t. Thnx soooo much but more please

The story line was great. As for the sex scenes... I wouldn't recommend anyone read them without a lover nearby. Cold showers would have to last for hours to even come close to helping. And other methods were about as helpful as the cold showers.

Great story. I enjoyed it very much and may even go back to reading comics, sorry, graphic novels.

People running away because of her eye color or a minor but visible scar? Yeah, that's just not a believable source for character drama in a non-fantasy setting no matter how well written the story is.

5 stars this was fantastic

I'm not quite sure how I've missed this story, with all the times I've been through these stories, but I'm glad I finally found it. What an outstanding story! Thank you for sharing it with us!

I really enjoyed this story, well thought out, scripted on several levels. Bravo.

The writing was tight and the storyline was well crafted.

I think I might've enjoyed the whole story being about CJ & The Tempest. Would've made for an interesting sub genre in these two characters clandestine journey

Excellent read thank you

Lovely story. Enjoyed it immensely.

"First the gauntlet gloves came off, ..." That's like saying "Naan bread," or "Tuna fish." 😉

Great story, well done!

Fabulous ...... Your fantastic scenerie connected to a comic ....... Extraordinary

The English language is full of redundancies and oxymorons, especially as it's spoken rather than written.

And the odd thing about 1st person prose is that, in a very real way, it's all spoken. So writers of fiction should be given wide latitude in the everyday use of the language. That freedom, in large part, is what allows the language evolve.

Every word and phrase in the language came from someone's "misuse". Look up "grok" as an example; it was outright invented in Robert Heinlein's Stranger in a Strange Land, and now it's a serious word that appears in the Oxford English Dictionary.

Embrace language distortion; it's actually a good thing.

I absolutely loved this, thank you for the great story 😊

Really great story.

Third time reading it as exciting as the first. Once yiubstart reading you just have to finish it.

I find it rather implausible that so many people would find Kaden's eyes shocking or horrifying. Seems to me they'd be quite fascinating. That apart, lovely story,

Very well written storey line. I liked the way the storey developed and gives hope to all who carry a deformity. Beauty is only skin deep after all. Nice to see the erotica did not overshadow a good love storey.

Loved the story.

How did it come about that she told her she new about the wolf foundation there was things that wasnt explained in the story which hurts the story

God, I wish there was a sequel! I've read this wonderful story at least 4 times in the last several months!

VERY well done!!

A good story!

There needs to be more from these characters, please?

Totally enjoyed this story, a lot better than the wham Bam thank you ma'am story out there!

Thank you!

Only 5 start to award. Such a shame.

It needs 50 (as an absolute minimum🤩🫡)

I would like to award you with the Nebula Award, if I could.

Well written, excellent plot, not only humping and bumping but a real story with head and tail. Also important, the end not being the end!

Sequel please, pretty please....

Muito bom, outra vez.

You need to get together with an artist and turn this into a graphic novel! It's seriously good writing!

But down deep, just more of the same. It's all about a relationship that's all about selfish desires, wanting things the way you want them, instead of being complimentary with another person. Sex was designed to be music in harmony, the homosexual World wants to just do Melody all the time.

To the last anonymous person... Why do you even look at anything here? You obviously don't like the category, or probably anything on this site. This is a wonderful story, no matter how much you want to run it down.

photog112: Be specific. What about the comment do you disagree with? Do you expect social points for criticizing the person that you view as the enemy?

Thoroughly enjoyed this. Welll written, well executed. No negative thoughts here