All Comments on 'High Interest Loan Ch. 03'

Again very well written and very enjoyable read with just enough mix of sex and story but also left with the feeling the door is open to pick up again with these four in another story so for me its a great story with options of carrying on.

Please keep up the great work

Althea Rose, a 5-star effort as usual. And, again, from reading your bio here, it makes me think it may be somewhat autobiographical. I know you're not Sean and probably not Beth but could see you as either Donna or Alex. My guess would be Alex. But that's not important. What's important is that you continue writing. There is a lot of sexy writing on this site. But there is not a lot of literary quality sexy writing like yours on this site. Thank you very much!

Hope this is not the end of these four. I am sure there is more of this story to tell and look forward to it. Thanks for this!!!

I love the way you express the emotional as well as the cerebral. You constantly make your readers want more. Did I mention you were a fantastic juggler? Great job as always.

occasionally one stumbles upon a profile / Author that totaly rocks your world.

AltheaRose has most assuredly Rocked the Literotica world this year.

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quality writing , intense scenarios , depth of character , interesting & engaging dialogue , amazing interaction between protagonists & beautifuly crafted sexual encounters ... Truly remarkable , ticks all the boxes .

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i will forever look at Hollyhocks with a smile & fond remembrance of the tales you created.

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xxxhugsxxx

What a magnificent story and told so well. I will be smiling for weeks just thinking of the details and I totally endorse the comments of legsfeettoes. THANK YOU.

Unlike many stories here, you weave a muli-dimensional tale that is enticing, satisfying to the point of explosion, then leave us wanting more.

The complicated and unexpected emotional reactions of poly relationships when expanding what is "normal" in your life is well displayed here. Doing unexpected things without knowing why - driven by insecurity, fear and desire are hallmarks of young relationship exploration. I'm glad Alex seemed to settle on 'try it if it doesn't seem harmful'.

Sean's caution is something I've experienced when offered such an opportunity... 'Am I in trouble if I go with my primal urges?' You skilfully capture his awareness that a critical decision is upon him.

Please keep writing, the pedants in the world need such fine writing to keep us happy ;-).

My girl does it again. You made the story even better. lol

I enjoyed the story and all you other stories.

I will look forward to more of you great work.

Tom

I appreciate the kind words, but am disappointed in myself for the number of little errors

I missed!

Love your stories, AltheaRose, and have noticed I'm not the only one who wondered if there's not a lot of autobiography written into it.

You are one helluva writer.

On first reading, something felt slightly out of balance, as though the events of this chapter were too rushed, considering the previous 2 chapters.

I think there is a psychological truth to this, and the author even anticipates the feeling and has one of her own characters express the feeling. Specifically, Donna:

"But, this seems like a big turnaround for you. I mean you flew all the way here because you were concerned about us being together. Now, you want to watch us. I don't get it."

I assume the author is trying to deal with emotional/psychological issues going on in the mind of Alex, and these are expressed as 'action' in the story. That's usually what good stories do - they embody feelings in actions.

In other words, the undercurrent of this story is really psychological. Alex has a very hard time in this story. She carries all of the weight of the dilemma. Everyone else is a support character for Alex. As long as the focus stays on Alex and only Alex, then the story serves its purpose.

If read a different way, less on Alex and more on the situation with all participants, then we see that the author has stacked everything in favour of Alex. Imagine having three friends, including a boyfriend, who are all already where Alex wants to get to. They made it easy for her, there, waiting for Alex to break out of her emotional/psychological cocoon.

It would be an interesting project for the author to examine Alex's dilemma - what it is that she's struggling with - but without such an ideal support environment. For three chapters I was wondering about alternative plot lines, complications, where something would go wrong -- not because I wanted a bad end, but because I was curious about how Alex would deal with a real obstacle. Considering the trauma that poor Alex went through here, with support, one wonders whether she could have handled a more serious obstacle.

Anyway, an interesting thought experiment. Delve more deeply into this big turnaround, nuance the transition.

What a wonderful way to finish off this series! Happy endings for everyone!! AltheaRose continues to write with sensitive feelings and she conveys a sense of reality in her stories that is hard to match. Her characters struggle with the implications of their decisions, and they display a rare and deep-seated love for each other that is really rare. Thank you for this particularly emotional story series. I can't wait for your next stories!!

Thank you!!! FIVE STARS!!!

Bravo! Well done! I can't add any more superlatives beyond--More!

Wow, what a chapter! Loved it - damn on Point/Descriptive. Like a couple others - there just HAS to be a good deal of autobiographical to this - especially the Vivid 'sexual descriptions' of Donna and Alex! IF there were not a degree of 'experience' there, then ya done one heck of a job imagining! :) Great job.

Loved the way you ended this. I'm comfortable with it ending here. There is however many ways it can continue. I would like to see more. I know you will do a great job if you decide to go further. Thanks again for a great experience :)

I've read hundreds of stories here. This series just might be the best ever. The characters are multi-dimensional. Your writing is outstanding. And the plot has a sophistication worthy of a published author. Bravo!

You really know how to tell a story. I thoroughly enjoyed this one. The suspense keeps building all through the story. The ending leaves the possibility for a sequel. I really hope there is one.

This story worked so well on several levels. The plot was well structured, with each of the three chapters having its own integrity. The writing made me want to know what happened next. I'm interested in stories which explore the distinctions between love and sex, which this did superbly.

but there was a section where I was getting really annoyed by the whiny Alex character but you got me through that. Thanks for the story. Edit error: Near the end you say that Donna and Alex joined them on the last day instead of Donna and Beth.

Goodness Althea, that was one helluva story! Nicely layered with some great characters. Except for Beth, she seemed to be more interested in getting into Alex's panties instead of trying to help her like she said she would. Then literally conning her into having sex with her. But despite that I still enjoyed the story, and you ended it just right.

It was great that Donna was a hellion in bed because that was what Sean needed and Alex wasn't giving it to him. But now with the lessons that she got from Donna and Beth I think she'll be able to put that to good use and who knows, maybe it won't be necessary for them to have a three way!

Great story, great writing!

Thank you

Ted

What a sexciting story! Please do not leave it here - there is still so much story left.

For one, the four together could make such a lovely story!

So, please get writing!

This is one of the best stories I've read on Lit. Excellent character development combined with sensual erotica. The way you managed to show Alex's resistance to Beth's relentless advances was terrific and you culminated with a great description containing raw sex between two women. Great job.

I loved to read this story, all three parts. Let me share a few thoughts I had:

There is a lot of depth in it, I've seen many stories here that basically add one hot scene on top of the previous but here I found not just scenes but key moments of a development, both the present time parts as the reminiscences discussing the development of the protagonists sexual identity. Her cocon, the internalized sexual repression, her fierce denial of parts of her own desires. How she projects her inner crisis into a manifest crisis outside. How she utterly fails to handle seeing her lover and her best friend and how they all hold her and take her in their arms after her breakdown.

Beth as the *dea ex machina* offers some explanation, private jet and limitless patience but it remains plausible.

For a while now I'm hunting for erotica from f. authors because among them I find more of stories with depth, with sex motivated from relation and emotion and less of an olympic 'bigger higher faster' discipline. Thanks for that.

A wonderful, life-affirming, sex-affirming--and also funny--ending chapter. Halfway through the chapter, I had the sinking feeling that Sean and Donna were going to reveal that they had NOT had sex with each other because they both care so much about Alex, and sexual fidelity is oh-so-important, and blah blah blah blah blah. I'm very impressed and delighted that that definitely did NOT happen! The whole trilogy is super, but I do like Chapter 3 the best.