All Comments on 'High School Again? Ugh! Ch. 05'

PLEASE keep it going. I fully understand about the crash and lost work but now you know the reason for backups.

I look for this continuing saga every time I log on. Thank you for getting back to this.

Sorry to hear about your loss of work, however you have talent, and that talent will get you through this annoyance!

Can't wait for the next chapter.

SL x

Can't tell you how much I've missed your stories. I've read a lot of crap since your comupter crash and it's great that you're back. Love all of your writing, and this one is particularly interesting.

even after these months, I sort of doubt your proclaim to having found your writing passion again. <p>

this chapter, while still readable, just did not have the unique, subtle, and inexplicable qualities the previous first chapters had. <p>

this chapter, instead, turned into a "Las Vegas Thing" orgy cliche nonsense. <p>

My last comments, at the end of the last chapter were quite on target: that the old ancient Greek animist gods and goddesses were becoming NOT vehicles but EXCUSES for the various meandering developments of a simple, unique, interesting, and frankly endearing time-travel, science fiction story about a middle aged man ---- who had tasted disappointments and SORROW in life ---- who was totally unwittingly thrown back in time, into his latter high school years... who had some fleeting thoughts about going about trying to see, may be because his "real life" or may be despite it, if he could prevent or metigate such sorrow.... by intervening NOW, during this Gulliver's Travels like state of existence.... to see if he could prevent his little and adoring sister from her pains; prevent his dad from eating himself to a heart attack... and prevent his mom from developing Alzheimer's.... <p>

Interesting enough, there is still NO CURES for Alzheimer's in the present time, the year 2010, despite the extraordinary advancement of science in the last quarter of a century... so I HAD THOUGHT the man-boy's time travel would be unique and different from other cliche ones.... by having him focusing on these things that CAN NOT BE CHANGED.... <p>

But I guess the temptation to go into cliche and other nonsensical sub-plots was too great a pull for even writers who stumbled upon really endearing little stories...

Great chapter. This whole novel is really interesting. I can't wait to see where you are going with it.

Welcome back! This story is VERY interesting. Keep up the great work!

I don't think, as another does, that you have changed your story. Sure it's a cliche to have an orgy in Vegas, but just aboutany other plot would have put a much faster resolution to this story than it seems you do. Your eroticism is off the chary, and your story in my top five. Can't wait for number six!

Jerry in Washington State, USA - I had given up on any new chapter of this story but just happened to check your story list and noticed this new chapter. I enjoyed your quality writing but just not as interested in the gods and goddesses popping in and out. Due to the long delay since the previous chapter, this story is no longer on my "check every day" list, but I am still curious about how this story is going to end. So I'll still visit occasionally and see if there is a new chapter. I was previously very interested in the main characters but now mainly just a curiousity of what happens next without the emotion attachment I once had.

First of all,

I love the whole story 'til now, but I'm somehow glad that it's going back to the highschool scenario. The Las Vegas setting wasn't bad or anything, but somehow I liked the character developments better while he was at home.

In Vegas that part seemed to be more forced or maybe pushed into the focus a bit too much. (that's just a feeling I got as I thought about it, I could be wrong here.)

Don't get me wrong. It definitly fit into the story that he had to break out but making him think about all of the stuff because some godesses were playing with him and his girlfriend shifted the story genre focus a little very much.

I licke that you don't ignore the reason for him being there being a godess as well, but it was very sudden and personally I would have liked a little more development into that direction beforehand.

After the silly little thoughts:

I totally love your writing and especially your insights into his mind and his problems. I'll definitly follow you and this story, whatever path it may take.

P.S. but please don't create another situation like the one where he finds Tara between Heras legs. I'm not sure if my heart could take it^^ (did I say that I totally love your characters?^^)

It has been too long. I am glad that you are back in gear and publishing. Please keep it up. This is a great story and I hope that you continue it for many more chapters.

Love this story. Please post another chapter soon.

I started reading this story beacuse I liked the time travel angle and I loved your Joel and Carrie story, but what you've turned it into is a great epic with parallels to some of the great greek myths I cannot wait for the next chapter. Hopefully sooner than any other please

The ending of chapter 4 was lame (it was all a dream, really?) but this is even worse. This story is all over the place. Fates, Goddesses, Timetravel, Gangrape. I like your writing, I liked the idea for this story, but you're loosing me quickly.

hey mate loved it please right more

Why do I keep thinking of Kevin Sorbo???

Are you going to continue this story? Or atleast give it a proper ending? There's soo much we have yet to learn.

I just started reading this series and while it's interesting, deep and very thought provoking it does seem to be a little over the place. Alhough what happened to Tara was a bit over the top, like seriously, again?! Ugh!

Please finish it, seems like it deserves an ending and maybe a HEA at that? (wink wink, nudge nudge)

When's the next chapter due Joe?

I have enjoyed reading this story, and went back to read all the chapters again when I found this new chapter. Time travel is an exciting concept, and the idea of going back to high school is intriguing. The concept sounds great, but the story shows the pitfalls. I'd still take the chance if offered.

Many thanks for all your hard work, and please continue the story. Why do some people have to critical of other's creations? Just go on to another story if you don't like it.

For years, one of my favorite novels has been "Replay", by Ken Grimwood. Your story reminds me in many favorable ways of that novel. I'll be looking forward anxiously for further chapters.

Damn those Gods. Let's hear their punishment and then get Tara straightened out. She's had enough grief and so has John. Let them tell each other their stories and then live happily ever after.

couldn't put it down, keep it up!

Wow what a great story had to read it all the way through. Hope that you continue the story one of the best here

went off the rails - compelling novella up until this point. Having the gods basically take over the story cheapened the previous chapters, big mistake. Oh well, was good for 4 chaps anyway.

The last anonymous comment said the same thing I did in the last chapter as I was rereading the whole thing to get ready for the present chapter. (As a matter of fact I thought it was my comment for the first sentence) Agree with that comment completely. Only 3 stars after everything else was 5.

Aesclepius, Aesclepius, where are you?????

Fantasy only works when it's rooted in reality. This is airy fairy nonsense.

until it became overwhelmed with all the mythology stuff

Zero stars should be an available score. After the gang rape, I am done with this author, sorry that I wasted my time, and glad that he lost his stories.

Incredibly Idiotic, you turned a really good thing into a total worthless pile of cow manure.

Have to agree with the others, seems like this chapter doesn't even fit with the previous four. It's not *that* bad per sé, but it took whatever the story had and violently pushed it into another direction which I'm sure many didn't expect.

I agree with many who commented. Your first four chapters were incredible, not only as erotica but as mainstream literature. However, this chapter - at least for me - ruined what you had previously developed. The Greek goddesses were a compelling plot point as long as they were on the sidelines. To feature them so prominently and incorporate a gang rape scenario did not fit with your previous style and it destroyed my interest in seeing the main characters (John and Tara) remain together.

I liked it. Of course it's not the usual kind of story - particularly erotica - but it was surprising, interesting, decently well written, and still sexy enough to warrant being on this site. The gang rape was harsh, of course, but the way you wrote it left out most of the details that likely would've ruined the whole thing. I'm invested in the main characters, and I care what happens. Seems to me, that's the entire point of any kind of story.

Admittedly, this isn't the type of story I generally get into on this site (it's definitely no "Joel & Carrie" or "My Cousin's Sorority" [the latter being one of my favorites on literotica]) but this is turning into a story that's different and interesting. So yeah. Five stars.

Thanks for destroying such a good story line by raping the love interest..... yet again.... fuck tard

As a writer you have a vision of the story. As a reader, I can like, dislike or be neutral about a story I read. I honor those who can write - I can't. I don't expect a writer to write "my" story - I want him/her to write the story in his/her heart/mind/soul. If a story turns in a direction I don't care for, I can choose to read on to see what happens or put it away. Again, I respect that my visions are not those of the writer. I appreciate that you share your talents with us and I thank you for that.

All of that said, I don't care for rape situations but I'm enjoying your story. Tara has been set up, it appears, to have been harmed by rape so that is the story. Your storyline is interesting - I've gotten to look up lots of gods and goddesses in Wikipedia - and I'm looking forward to see what occurs in these lives. Best wishes.

I honestly didn't see that coming had to stop reading for a second I got angry there for awhile. It was just a total blind side, but so far good story I'm wondering where it goes next.

First you have to add that shitty "and then I woke up" ending. Then you take two steps back from developing their relationship. Mix in a little rape and ensure that the story goes absolutely nowhere, and you have quite possibly the shittiest "do-over" story ever written.

I know some of the people on here don't like/appreciate the conflict, but I love it. Keep up the great writing and storytelling.

... yet. Why would Hera come down to screw with John's life? Was it on the orders of the Fates? Was it by herself? What was her motive???

Did she tell him about her uncle or was this a dream? Or perhaps he has some power you didn't tell us about.

The story is unraveling.

I was up and down with this story, good parts and annoying parts, until this chapter, which was truly horrible. I'm now done with this tale.

way to RUIN a good story! wish I had stopped at ch3 so I'd have avoided this nonsense. stupid fucking gods? and it took you MONTHS to come up with this crap?

1*

I hate you jerkwad authors that take a good story and totally fuck it up with nonsense like this.

This is the second time I have read this series. It's been a long time since the first time... So long I forgot about this chapter. As a matter of fact I was so pissed off the first time through I stopped reading the story entirely. I finally made it through this chapter. I'm hoping the rest of the story is fantastic to make up for this chapter.

Long and painfully. I loathe authors like this. I honestly truly want bad things to happen to you. There was no reason to do this.

I hope you can redeem yourself in my eyes or I will not consider you as a favorite author anymore. That was cruel

Her original incest rape and her running out was a dream? So you follow up with a drugging and her being raped by 4 people. And people liked or loved the chapter. That was a terrible chapter. The story lost focus after Rodgers suicide now it's a who's who of the Greek pantheon joining us every chapter? It's weak story telling and lame excuses as to why it isn't very good. What started off strong has gone to shit rather quickly.

Somehow the most unenjoyable back-in-time story I've ever read. Bringing the Gods into the whole thing was just a huge mistake in my opinion. It ruined everything and dragged the story away from the premise it was built on.

Just a a quick note to say thank you for sharing your story with us. One of the reasons I read the stories here is to see where each writer takes their story from beginning to end. It is always your path and I'm grateful to be on the journey.

Keep writing!

So, what, she's just supposed to get over it? WE are just supposed to Get Over IT?

Here's the primary thing you need to understand before I write one more word:

You cannot give the reader something to care about, and then take it away without any reason or explanation and expect your story to have the same depth of connection that you spent thousands of words so lovingly crafting between you and I.

You have Tara suffering from a past incestuous sexual assault and yet claiming some supernatural (soulmate) connection with our hero. He's starting to believe in Love for the first time in his life. It's a turning point.

Then there was that awful "it was all a dream" moment that confused the hell out me but then you move forward and things seem to be going well and then... what was the point of giving me something to look forward to when you are going to mindlessly smash it?

I knew it was Hera and I knew it was bad given the look she gave John, but I was more afraid that Hera was mind-raping Tara and she wouldn't like men anymore. Regardless, I knew that something terrible was happening...

Meanwhile, we're supposed to be turned on by His rape instead? I kept skipping ahead, because I saw him snapping out of it and I wanted to see what happened, but for the first time your amazing erotic writing was completely ignored because IT WAS RAPE... and Tara was suffering, so I just wanted to get past it, to find out what is going on.

What was going on is you brought in a motley crew of rapists because... why again? What did you do this for?

"The gods are doing it because that is what they do."

That's all the motivation/explanation you give me for eviscerating your own relationship. I've never seen such a contrived, pathetic excuse for a dues ex machina in 45 years of reading.

You used "the gods did it because" to force a gang rape for the sole purpose of destroying the relationship we the readers had just begun to care about.

Congrats, I don't care anymore.

The sickest thing is that this has an over 4.5 star rating, which means lots of people liked this vomit. You should be ashamed of yourself.

Story was pretty good up until this chapter when you decided to gang rape Tara.

I love this story. Youre clearly a good writer and i would love any links to further work youve done outside of literotica.

That said, i wanted to say a few things. There have been two major breaks in th story now. One is when John flees to Vegas and its the lesser of the two. The second is when the story of a man in his own past suddenly becomes the story of a man among divine beings. I think this chapter was really out of place here. Its not bad, its just written for a story that isnt this story. Even the criticism of the rape of Tara is easy to forgive if some context is different. As it is, im inclined to agree that its a strange choice as it just puts off something that was already being put off and you could easily have her just not be ready yet. Delaying for her discomfort of an existing trauma deepens it, whereas giving her an entirely new trauma is retreading things and is mostly just serving to make the theme and plot less subtle.

Anyway, as i was saying, i think the main draw of this story is the wonderful character development and world building you were executing at the level of 'old man back in high school'. That concept on its own is really good. In fact, if you never mentioned gods again after having the initial inciting incident utilize them, that to me would be a better story. Leaning into the god drama and magic only serve to detract from the interpersonal stuff and lessen the initial mystery. I hope you are well.

So sad I wasted time reading the rest of this.. Giving us a long sec scene while we know a main character with a traumatic rape history is being raped of stage is just too clueless. Having her then accept it and leave. I don't know how this chapter ends or how the story goes from here. I don't care to find out. Chapter o e should come with a trigger warning.

This chapter really sucked. Having a rape victim go through a forced gangbang was abhorrent. I'm not really sure if I want to go thru with a story which until this chapter was really good.

Really a shame that the author lost the interesting thread of being back in high school and instead focused on gods interfering with humans, which has little to no resonance as most of us haven't been fucked with by gods. When the gods were just an excuse for the adventure the adventure was fun, and I enjoyed the first couple of chapters, but the shark got jumped when gods versus humans became the focus, and it is a slog now.

Was really loving this but now it's lost it's luster. I wasn't looking for a story of the greek pantheon screwing over one guy. 2*

Story really went off the rails here. I'm hanging on, the story is currently foggy and less appealing.

Wow, what a change in plot direction. Unexpected but I'm interested to see what happens next. Well written series so far and keeps me guessing. Thanks for writing.

We'll, that chapter was a waste of time. Two meaningless orgies, one willing and one a gangbang rape. Hard to see this advancing the storyline.

what the duck just happened.

Worst tonal change in the plot. First three parts were really good. Huge letdown

Gang rape really changes the tone of the story...

I always hated greek gods with a passion. Aside from Hephaestus, they are basically the most psychopathic evil deities I can think of or think up.

investing so much time in this story only for the main character's girl to be gang-raped! dropping this shit and fuck you author and your cuckold fantasies

MC and friend going back in time with no gods would've been a better story.

I gotta say, this chapter was beyond fucked up! Raped by her uncle, then gang-raped in front of her boyfriend, that's way over the line. It doesn't fit with the rest of the story either. Just fucked up! I honestly don't know if I wanna keep reading.