All Comments on 'Holiday with Step Sister Pt. 03'

Thanks for this third chapter. I enjoy the serialized way this is developing. I gather you will finish this at the end of the holiday yes?

Good writing, good descriptions too. I can tell you are European as what you are writing about is actually correct. (good old google maps!)

Keep writing.

I only wish this story will never end and with Chris and Carol together forever.

I love the sex. Andrew and Karla sharing love making and being related closer.

Of course, Carol, Chris, Andrew, and Karla together would be a nice ending.

I do hope more will follow soon. Would love to read more and see where this story will lead to before returning back to the states. Even when Chris and Carol returned back to the states, would love to see how you handle the relationship between Sheryl v. Carol.

The story does need a bit more sexuality playout of passion between the characters to bring the heighten of feeling within the reader's body. Otherwise not bad.

It's been 12 months since this chapter appeared.

Can you confirm if there be another episode ? And if so, when ?

Thanks !

Rapier

I really like the way you took it slow with introducing them to each other. I sure hope they’ll be more to the story. Please let me know

Swapping is not my subject. So if it was in the next chapter I will not read even you write.

New chapter coming up within the next few days.

Why did you portray the narrator as American when it's obvious from your use of language and spelling that you're from the UK. Oh, and no one has called Black people "colored" (or "coloured", as you spelled it") since the early 1950s. Also, most Americans have no clue about Celsius temperatures--we use Fahrenheit.

If you just had made it a 2 hour flight instead of 8, and didn't call home the "US of A" (few say that either, anymore), None of these things would have been an issue.

There's no such thing as a "nudist colony" since the mid-'80s. They're referred to as nudist resorts.