by mpqm1968
This is such a awesome story mpqm1968 i can't stop visualizing this story, don't stop writing!
This was the best one yet - and yet, it was the shortest? I have no idea why, you certainly could have stretched it out. Don't be afraid of length, the more detail, the better. Keep going!
Oh Mark keep it up PLEASE!
Keep writing chapters like that and you'll end up with some of the highest ratings possible here. Fantastically erotic! And, yeah, don't be afraid of length. Add as many details and scenes as you would like into your chapters. Feel free to draw out the sex scenes, add dialogue, expand upon the settings and surroundings... in literature, more is definitely better, despite what the editors might say.
Keep 'em cumming!
Clearly, the most erotic part of this story for both Meg and Beth was Matthew's fucking of their mother. Not only was it an exciting story to hear about, but it opened everything up for them. After all, if their mother could fuck their brother, so could they! There is nothing like a mother fucker!
Nookiehunter
This series is really getting hot. Three down, two to go. I can't wait for Amy's party.
A very hot sex scene while experiencing another much earlier depraved moment...Tricky, and very well done...Getting hotter in here...
stomped her foot and created but (INCOMPLETE THOUGHT!!!!)
mind blowing (mind-blowing)
remove his socks and trainers (DID HE WEAR HIS SOCKS OVER HIS SHOES????)
reaching (the) boiling point
envelope the bloated (envelop)
two haves apart (halves)
Meg sprang up (to spring)
rampant cock (POOR UNCLEAR DESCRIPTION!!!!)
his closest relatives (relative)
VOTE 1* FOR EVERY STORY RATED BY THAT TRANNY BITCH FOOL VASTIESMITH2 AKA BONNIETAYLOR2 AKA ANON!
Gawd there are some fucking whiny ass grammar nazis here, damn! You know what? To me the story itself is so enjoyable that I've barely bothered noticing any errors. It's kind of nice to run across a story every once in a while in this section that actually keeps your attention without being the same old crap! ...Looking forward to reading the rest! Thanks for writing!