All Comments on 'Hotwife Co-Worker Ch. 03'

by amofiga

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AnonymousAnonymousabout 4 years ago
WORDY

This whole chapter could have been left out with no loss to the plot.

A simple sentence,

"I went to Dr. Jeff and [anticipating what I expect in the next chapter] when the test results came back negative, I was cleared for action,"

could have replaced this chapter.

The business trip and masturbation (which I mostly skipped) were filler that could (should) have been deleted.

Story is toooo verbose.

Paul in Oklahoma

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