by I_Dusk
I had to give up. The grammatical errors, along with general incongruence of language just made it impossible to get into this story, although I'm sure the concept was good. This was like trying to read a Chinese Amazon product description.
Thank you for your feedback blade_rocknut.
I know what you mean... It was my first try to write, and even for myself, it isn't good now. I tried to post here the edited version, but it took admins over four days, and then I had to upload the next chapter... So I gave up as I didn't want it to be stuck in the queue...
I will probably delete these first chapters and post them again as newly edited ones.
You can find the proofread ones on my patreon (its free to see all chapters I’ve posted already on LE). Just click on HomHS tag.
Why add some random guy to the equation? Isn't it interesting enough with only brother in law?
Regular hookups are boring.