by we_all_kneel
Could have been interesting but there are so many grammar and syntax errors (so poorly edited) that it's hard to follow the story line
Sorry, friend, but I doubt I will become a native speaker anytime soon. I did all I could to make the text as readable as possible, but there's only so much I can do. If grammar and syntax errors make it impossible for you to focus (to which I can totally relate to in my first language, so no hurt feelings) you best avoid my work.
Had no problem with grammar or syntax errors. I have a bachelor's degree and am a native speaker. You did fine.
I liked it, but I'm not a big fan of dirty toilets or piss. It's dirty and it stinks. Makes me want to vomit.