by Boratus
I rarely give stories a 5-star rating, but this was a no-brainer. I loved the situation, the writing was excellent, and I quite look forward to reading what happens next! Keep up the good work!
-- Skycladdist
A great story.
Let's have a follow up. May be he can get the doctors app ?
Loved the story. I'm really hoping there is more to follow.
That would be poetic justice...
Brilliant start make sure you follow as has allot of potential for a series
I normally don't comment on other's stories, under my moniker. But I really enjoyed this story and look forward to the next installment.
Good job!
I didn't want it to end...
I do hope you'll continue this story, won't you? Pretty please?
I think it was very nicely done. I look forward to seeing and reading more.
Well timed and not over the top but was he able to get pass the Doctor security system
The story was well thought out and progressed well, but could have used some edits as far as basic writing mechanics. I hope there's a part 2, and I hope Shaun uses his videos to blackmail the doctor for more women or for money.
Well done! The pace was good and I liked how you developed the relationships. Hopefully, there'll be some additional chapters where we get to see what happens with with the other women under the doctor's control. Maybe the daughter will get some hypno-help to aid her studying????
Yes I was thinking about it and then I read the comment before mine. If Shaun could get the the app from the doctor and use it on his girlfriend to make her less prudish he can openly have a relationship with the mother and daughter and neither of them would be jealous. He can also con the doctor to hypnotizing himself and turning himself in to the police and Shaun could take over all the doctors patients. How awesome would that twist be.
....I guess this is now revealed as a latent fantasy of mine.
I dated a girl in high-school who was one of the hottest girls around. Her mom was a more mature version of her, but both were stone foxes. Her mom was also, I think, a bit into domination. She would often show up from work and change into something sexier and more....strict as well as revealing. She often ordered both of us about, standing imperiously as she gave orders and commented on our performances.
And like her daughter, she had the best rack and tightest ass in the county.
My girlfriend directly benefitted from her mom's sexy look. Oh, and when we would sit to dinner, she would often run her hand lightly across my shoulders and neck, just in my hairline, as she walked past while bringing things to table. BOING!! My biggest fantasy was of possessing them both, giving them babies the same week and fucking them senseless all the time. My girlfriend, as I mentioned, got it often and hard. She was an avid and noisy participant....but I never got the chance with her mom. They had to go back to my girlfriend's grandparent's ancestral home to help take care of her grandpa. In spite of everything, we never crossed paths again.
Please continue.
I'd like to see him come across the "good" doctor's app and use it on him to return all the money he'd taken, close his "practice" and become a celibate monk in a monastery in Lukla, Nepal. After that? Well....you're the writer!
Thank you.
I liked the slow but thorough approach Shaun took to get and maintain control. I hope Shaun continues to build his harem and takes control of the doctor's app. There are many great possibilities you have left open. Congratulations on a great story line that I hope will continue.
...but some real clangers in the writing, eg., "He pulled her titbit weak"
Firm believer in "less is more" and "leave them wanting more". Leave it as is, perfection in my opinion
And Abby sounds like she would be an excellent addition.
You need to get the redhead involved here please. It would be so hot to have them booth at one time
Glad to see you're still writing. Hope to see more from you.
Think there needs to be a continuation of this story - the friend definitely, ideally the daughter too!
More, more and more PLEASE. I absolutely love how Shaun has hijacked the Doctor's work. If somehow Shaun could get his hooks into the Doctor and then have the Doctor working for him the possibilities are endless.
The building suspense of gradually sexually conquering the mother is what made this a great story. That suspense and eroticism involving him and the mother can not be repeated in another chapter. To be a success something new and unexpected must happen. Maybe he could add the daughter and the mothers friend to his harem, as well as a few others, and share them with his college buddies. Better still, turn them into prostitutes and sell their services. That's just an example of something different and dramatic. I'm sure you'll come up with something on your own that will knock the socks off all of us.
Seriously wasn't expecting to see this pop up.
I can't read it right now, but I intend to soon.
Meanwhile... "Confidence" is the story we really need more of!
You, sir, are a master of writing. Are you published on Amazon or anywhere else?
This was a really great read. Interesting idea, good characters and hot writing. It really needs to continue since it left so much open and unresolved:
What happens with Amanda?
What happens with Abby?
What is that app?
Will Maddow cause trouble once he realizes Jessica is not his thrall anymore?
I really do hope you continue this story. But if not, I hope you continue providing similar engaging stories.
Thanks!
Wow welcome back! This was a great read! Any chance of finishing confidence as well?
Well here's hoping that more of "Confidence" starts playing on repeat in your head, if that's what it takes to get you writing.
Maybe reread the 5 chapters you posted so long ago to get the mental loop started. That story is even better than this one. (And this is 5 stars.)
I usually don't read stories other than sci-fi. When I came across your story I wasn't expecting such elegance and class. You are a gifted writer and as far as the continuation of story is concerned, you better not hang us in the mid.
WP
I really liked the way this story develops and the gratuitous sex is, of course, great. Please keep working on it. I would like to see how dr maddow takes it when he figures out he's lost control. I want to see how his girlfriend reacts to her boyfriend and mother fucking. Since Shaun only took advantage of the programming by dr maddow, what's he gonna do now? He doesn't know how to hypnotize anyone. What's he going to do to keep his girlfriend and her mom? Please don't let me down, keep writing man!!!
Wow. Just finished reading this and wow. Me and my girl friend read this together on a raod trip wither parents. Wow. Never thought that an erotic story could help sex the way it did. Leep it up.
Boratus unless you are posing under another name (though not sure why you would change names in that case) someone ripped you off and is selling this on Smashwords as “Skullduggery by Gowan Bush”
Thanks for letting me know about the plagiarism. I've reported the book on smashwords. Please report it as well so we can get it off as soon as possible.
Thanks for this story, Ill use it as inspiration to do my own hypnosis story soon. 1 note though, I would have liked it more if there was more reluctance on the moms part
Also Im really looking forward to another installment, maybe he hypnotizes his girlfriend and increases the attraction between mother and daughter?
Fantastic story. It flowed really well and quite naturally. Would love to read another chapter.
That was a really hot story. We thrive on a desire for control/lack of control. This story hit the nail on the head. Write more.
Damn fine story, one of the best on here! Please, please continue with this, there are a lot of great ideas and lead-ins for more!
I loved how mom had trouble giving in to her feelings, how you wrote it was incredible. But like Alexstraza said, I would liked to have read even more noncon or teasing by Shaun. At a certain point it felt a little rushed.
I am very happy to finally find a story like this, where the victim of mc has trouble with her feelings, I've read 100s of mc stories and I can think of maybe 5 this well written with this story-angle in it.
I also, like Alexstraza asked, love the idea of getting the daughter hypnotised.
Maybe get the mom (and maybe Abby too) in the situation where she finds she's getting more and more attracted to her daughter. And her daughter teases her subconsiously by dressing sluttier and sluttier. But still have the daughter be very selfconsious about her sexuality.
Great story! Do you plan to continue it? If so, I greatly look forward to part 2.
Very interesting and a great master art piece. Please write more on this story and more in general.
Loved the story, please write the next chapter!
Can't wait to see how deal with the not so good Dr. and Amanda!
Perhaps the Doctor needs to know submission?
I really enjoyed the story and the control especially. My only concern was the slut stuff. I love women and sex and for me it just took the edge off the story when yr character started calling her slut etc.Otherwise a great story.
I want to commend you on putting together such a great story that kept me glued to the words all the way through. I know this story started out as a stand alone but it would be a travesty not to continue where you left off. Please continue!!!
Great Story, needs another chapter or 2 or more!!
What is the doctor going to do to Abby and how will that affect Jessica's and Abby's relationship as well as Amanda's relationship with her new "slut" Mom?
Tune in next week for the answers to these and other questions of how many women will the doctor put under his control.
Although as a stand alone story this works fine I do agree I wouldn't mind a chapter or two more... Maybe get that daughter out of her comfort zone too?
I can't wait for more, i feel like there's still so much story left to tell!
We all knew the main character was going to try and become #1, but I kept reading and reading curious how (or if) the main character could pull it off.
Great Job.
Thanks
Great story but I need more. Will he fuck Abby? What will he do to the doc? And Amanda. Will she ever know Shaun owns her mother?
So many questions and a sequel is the perfect answer.
Liked the story but I don't thin in is finished yet. You life out too many questions un answered. Number one is what if anything will he do about the doctor. That is a big question that needs to be answered.
Great story please continue a part 2. Like how does he get rid of the doctor? And how about the daugther Amanda aka his girlfriend, does she find out and if so will she end up approving or will she be disgusted by it? I'd love to hear how he just dominates the hell out of the doctor, cuckold him and then have the doctor start bringing him a harem of women. This is exactly what needs to be done to all of our women these days...they need to be treated as our sec slaves and breeding toys!!!
this is the goodest story of mind control and has than have the second part
Great story It was very hard (no pun intended) to put down. Only I would like to have seen a little more of the daughter interacting with the mother. it Turns me on.
First let say that I'm not prone to leaving comments to often not am I one for giving 5 stars. Both your story has earned from me. I truly enjoyed reading and visualizing it. I truly do hope that you revisit this story and continue it. I look forward to reading your other stories.
Yes like many of the comments below if he could some how get the app from the doctor and get him to stop but not before providing all the information he has on his other patients so he can extend his harem including the Abby and maybe able to adjust the daughter to accept his news ways.
Mostly a good story should not get a sequel because it's perfect as it is. However this one is definitely not finished: the open doctor issues and the upcoming mother-daughter conflict have to be solved; the introduction of Abby makes no sense at all without a sequel. (I also wonder about your remarks about the white maid...)
Since I love a more subtle approach, his girlfriend should be hypnotized to persuade her mother to be friendlier to Shaun and show more affection (and get excited by this).
Abby could could become a follower (or a lover) of the mother and get caught indirectly through the submission of her friend...
bdgv
I think, you should complete this series. What do you think?
Stupid jokes aside, I really like this story and I hope you continue it.
After finishing it left me wanting more, I do hope you add to this story, I Think you should.
I can't believe it's been over 3 years since I wrote this! Feels like 6 months. In any case, the full-length novel version call "I Think You're Right" is available for pre-order on Amazon right now. What happens with Jessica and her daughter? Is Abby brought into the fold? Does the doctor discover what's happening and how does he react? I hope you can support me so I can keep writing here for free. I will be posting a completely new story here in a few weeks that you'll all enjoy.
Brilliant story. It deserves a more and a few sequel.
The fight back from the Doctor. Perhaps the Doctor stealing the daughter and Shaun losing her. Then the subsquent victory for Shaun.
Plenty of scope for you to keep this going.
But this story as a standalone was superb.
Loved the story and bought the Kindle version to support your work. Keep up the fantastic work. Slow seductions/corruptions are intense and you write them well.
This is one of the best eroticas I have read in a while! Truly fascinating. If possible, please continue the story
You're quickly becoming my favorite author on the site. I hope you continue to write and post on here. The mix of story telling, near perfect grammar and spelling, and masturbation fodder is amazing, keep it up. Thank you for all of the entertainment so far.
I just found out this book is on Amazon and have already purchased it. I can't wait to keep reading this!
Need the mother and daughter to be involved. But a bit more forcing on both women would make it more hot. Good read so far.
Oh this story need many more chapters... you should slowly destroy the Dr Maddow. Either blackmail with the video proof and turn the table on him. Build it up slowly. You could also put Amamda under Shaun control with the app at some point. Change her behavior and start a competition between Amanda and her mother about witch one is the slutiest... So many possible side storyline... make Abby also yours. Slowly build a Harem of rich woman under your control. Have all Woman used by the Dr. Become Femdom to the poor Dr. Shaun as Master of them all. Just a few ideas....
Just let the power of the story guide your writhing hand...
Enjoy it as we also will. 5 stars.
Definitely favourited and this 'chapter' certainly stands alone quite well but I'm a little disappointed that you didn't finish the story on here.
Excellent, well written and begs for a continuance. Ms Russo's inner slut presents so many possibilities for Shaun to help her explore. It's even possible that her daughter's inhibitions might be made to fall by the wayside.
Dear [insert deity you believe or don't believe in here], you have a gift at story telling. Keep up the good work. Encore to the power of infinity and beyond!!!!
I loved this story, have even bought the full version from Kindle and read it multiple times
Can you make a part 2 of this story?
Hello, I absolutely loved your story 'I think '
I loved how you portrayed Jessica and others with the correct use of Hypnosis also,the story was soo good that I even bought the Kindle version and have re-read it multiple times
I wanted to know if you are making a second part of this story for Shaun to get the doctor's remaining patients or even having some more fun and corruption with Jessica
Anyways thankyou for writing this amazing story and would love to see Jessica getting controlled and corrupted again;)
Thanks so much for purchasing it. I appreciate it. I'd love if you left a review on Amazon as well. Currently no plans for a sequel. I have another story I'm working on. Regular job has just kept me really busy.
And to the commenter way below: No I didn't die of Covid. 😂
Damn, I can't believe I stopped submitting stuff 3 years ago.
I have already left a review on Amazon but us fans would absolutely love to know what would happen further and all of us are eagerly waiting for a sequel. So if you get time from your daily schedule we'd love to see Jessica Shaun and others in the sequel. It's a request that this amazing story should get a sequel!!
Thankyou:)
Please, the premise is good but the character are just dull, repetitive and prosaic at this point, even boring.
Feels like this was just a Part 1. Clearly there was so much left to tell. Oh well.
Hey! Just read I Think. A very nice story. A good length full of good twists and turns. It doesn’t just follow the expected routines. Has good development. Many stories would just have them jump into bed on the second meeting. I really appreciated that you took the time to make the characters work for the result a bit.
Thank you and I look forward to see if you come up with a part 2 or a sequel / prequel.