All Comments on 'I Used to Know Her'

I think this may be the strongest piece you've written - at least in terms of the pure unadorned emotional impact it held for me. Thanks *****

Enjoyed reading a non-erotic piece with style for a change.

Generally love the amount of emotion you normally put in your work, but this one said a lot in a very short time. I sit and think that it leaves a lot unexplained, but at the same time it wraps things up completely. This is a short glimpse into the main guy's life, where we find out he had someone that he cared for, but she ended up choosing her family over him. I think she could see her less than stellar future, with whoever her parents paired her up with, but she still chose that path forward. Great work, and look forward to more from you!

RNebular

Nice short story; characters definitely have emotion although, they seem to have the mentality & maturity of juvenile adolescents. Not wanting to confront his own issues by avoiding them; he shows the maturity of someone a quarter of his age.

Great short story....the emotions are so visceral and for someone who's been in the service the shattering effects are familiar. Well done!

get you through many perilious bumps in your life, TK U MLJ LV NV

Anonymous 10/04/17 Said:

"Spineless guy

Too afraid to even talk? UGH!"

Seriously? That's what you got from this? At some point she's got to take responsibility for her choices. The main character is already damaged. Just how many times can he be expected to line up for more disappointment?

Good story.

But the depth of emotions was explored extremely well.

Lue

Interesting and short. I liked it.

Editing left a lot (a lot) to be desired.

How old was she?

Was there to say. every time she Listened to her Parents. and Never gave him any thought . now she wants a Third Chance. better off w/o her Who will she listen to Next!

But I think he just knew that talking to her would only be wasting more time on her.

You are born and you die.

The period of time between those two events is your life, that's all you get.

There are people that waste your time, they are not worth another moment of your life.

It is not cowardice to not spend any time on them.

as another poster here observed, it needs editing. Too many run-on sentences, commas where there should be periods. Mistakes like that can ruin a story that's complimentary in other ways.

For sharing your own experiences. I agree with the emotional point, being very engaging and powerful. I can't help but get a "Kerouac" feeling from this. I guess it's from the ending and the part about finding your path. Anyway, I like the story. Thank you again.

JAFCritic

Just read this again and still love it. Great writing! Thanks you. It is very compelling, raw, open yet....I don't know. He is still very closed yet his wounds are real and raw. Simple rules he has and he lives them.

Powerful tale. I only wonder how old she actually was.

Moving. 5

She'll always have her parent to hold her and lover as she grown older all alone

because they need the parents more than they need a life.

wondered & wandered are two different words meaning different things.

This story totally lost me.

I enjoyed it. I do think Huedogg2 hit the nail on the head with his comment about dating’momma’s babies’. I know from experience, that can be an uphill, unwinable battle. Thanks for the story, Mike.

3 for you, because you only wrote the first few paragraphs of what I thought would be a great story.

Why don't you come back and flesh out the rest of it?

Guys want a good girl to be bad just for him; gals want a bad boy to be good just for her.

And never the twain shall meet.

LWlurker

Saaad

Great story. I left San Diego in much the same way. That was 33 years ago on a Kawasaki. We've never spoken since. Strange world we've created for ourselves

Pretty good but wished there was another chapter

Very good story, but sad. Needs to be finished...If it is to end here, it leaves two very sad unfulfilled lost although loved people. I hope someone comes to the rescue of this tale. LP

***Thanks for the read.

If there's any doubt there's no doubt. Just go

Well done.