by Sean943
This could have been a fun little story but it was spoiled for me by too many grammatical and spelling errors together with a number of incorrectly used words: for example, the girls went to a naturist beach, not a naturalist beach (check the difference). The story really needed a good editor. Again, I know it's only a story but I find it hard to accept that a woman officer in the Royal Military Police (or indeed any regiment but particularly the RMP) would go in for exotic dancing classes and shows, especially in a place with many military personnel around. The story was okay but could have been very much better.
It is a work of fiction, editorial points made are correct but were required by the site. Been a challenge getting clarity on site requirements, compromise is what you see.
Sorry. Today's British Army does not permit its officers to do things which would bring the service into disrepute. A captain was severely disaplined, with loss of rank, after being photographed dancing naked at Glastonbury a couple of years ago.
Fortunately the military is becoming easier on LGBTQ issues in the ranks, yet even officers can - and do - encounter abuse from their colleagues.
Anyway.
Lots of spelling mistakes and grammatical errors - there not their, for example.
The story was not too bad, the sex very much as a male writing a lesbian tale would play it, although having attended a few 'events' at stately homes myself I would guess what you described was different from my own experiences. (They did lead to me and a girlfriend having a wonderful summer as performers at Manumission, Ibiza, having wild and open three-way lesbian sex with air stewardesses, holiday reps and clubbers on a little stage amongst the crowds each evening. And we got lovely tans.)
Surprised you never mentioned the famous 'things' at Porton Down; or was the Official Secrets Act in force?
Lexi