by SmallTitFan
It starts slow, but is building nicely. I hope you can maintain the quality of your writing.
I am anxiously awaiting the next segment. Keep going slowly, don't use up all your ideas in one scene. Make it last. And I'll try to, too.
Thanks
Hope you continue along the same path. You started out "warm," and worked your way to the beginnings of "hot." You've established a nice pace, and do well at capturing your subjects in the readers' mind's-eye! I just loved it!
Al and Gen are terrific characters. I love the dialogue which enhanced the nice, slow start. I certainly agree with a previous poster that the pace should be kept slow as the two open up to each other and begin to explore sex together. Well done!
I agree with everyone also. Keep the pace slow like you have it. I've seen too many stories ruined because they rush through it and try to fit in all their ideas in one submission. Keep it up and I'll be awaiting the next chapter.
P.S. Just don't keep your slow pace when it comes to posting the next submission lol
Nice to see writing about tiny tits. They are such a turn-on!!
just right hot sex, good writing, nice build-up, thanks
They are well-written, have a nice tease, usually a little suspense, and fun great sex. few writers on this site do brother/sister stories as well as you. i hope you publish another one soon!!
oh - and 5 stars!
Love the way you slowly built the story from early childhood.
Can’t wait for the next chapter.