All Comments on 'Imperius Ch. 07'

A great scene between them after the distance. And the anal scene done very well, I can confirm from experience that is a very accurate and realistic depiction of the pleasure/pain threshold with proper preparation.

I was immensely sad she shot her commander but didn't consider comparing it to her warm-hand consideration for the disabled Magnus. In very different ways each was still a kindness/mercy. Though I'd be interested to know what Magnus finds curious/suspicious about the contrast. Now I bet she wishes she had her hands in an ice bucket when he was helpless haha.

I hope Saphir feels the twinge of guilt, shame on him haha. Unless he has an attachment and is happier with her around in a cage or on the flip side is dedicated to ol M's happiness. Also after that last scene from the previous chapter I wondered if D or S felt any arousal from what they saw, if Magnus ordered them to watch for their punishment or hers? Or are they too loyal/desensitised to feel anything else? Such a strange little ensemble/team.

Also I wonder if M's stomach would have flipped if L turned the gun on herself instead of the commander. He may be obsessed with owning her, but she has a lot of power over him by just her existence. Lol and in the early days when she said 'I saved you and you're enslaving me this is wrong' was so horrible and I feel bad for smiling because the irony reminded me of Harrison Ford's 'I didn't kill my wife!' in the fugitive - with the 'I don't care' response haha.

Anyway I'm getting carried away 5* for great work and a speedy delivery! x

I enjoyed your latest chapter but was hoping for more talking, lol. Still I loved it and can't wait for your next update!

After she comes with him in her butt, I would love to see her feel a bunch of guilt and think that she can take away some of his power by suicide. The chain is long enough that she could figure out how choke herself with it on the bedpost or something. Then Magnus will have to re-evaluate. And I am super curious why she shot her commander. I am hoping the next installment comes quickly.

This was perfect after the escape. I had no interest in any other characters for chapter 7 except these two and you delivered 100%. Magnus is unbelievably hot and domineering, I just want to read more and more about him. You capture his power and intellect well. I like the gentle aspects too (they mean more) but in this chapter it was clear he wanted to both possess and punish her, very well done.

Loved the "they may suspect attachment" line. He should just acknowledge the obsession is obvious and make her his courtesan.

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Thank you so much for the speedy update! I have to say I was waiting eagerly for this. There's just something so hypnotic and magnetic about Magnus' words and actions, I'm always so mesmerized by him, especially with his interactions with Lilah.

I did find Lilah shooting her commander pretty out of place in chapter 6, and thought that it seemed incongruous for an author who writes so meticulously. And you just had to drop all these twists in this chapter and blow me away. Really fantastic work - I love all the details you put in here so so much. Gotta say I did /somewhat/ expect that there's something behind Lilah's actions, though the detail with Saphir and the water lily is just the bomb. Sneaky Saphir, and I wonder what else has he got in his mind? I'm getting way too invested now!

I can see why you replied that I'd be satisfied with this chapter when I mentioned I'm intrigued by the Lilah/Saphir interaction. All of the 4 major characters in this chapter are interesting in their own ways and it makes me just want to explore each and all of their interactions with one another. And also, a lil random but I'd love to see more Eris/Saphir interaction in the future too.

Thanks for the hard work once again, and do keep on writing! You've got all that good stuff hidden up your author's sleeves (;

x

Shinya

"Whoah Hawt.

A great scene between them after the distance. And the anal scene done very well, I can confirm from experience that is a very accurate and realistic depiction of the pleasure/pain threshold with proper preparation.

I was immensely sad she shot her commander but didn't consider comparing it to her warm-hand consideration for the disabled Magnus. In very different ways each was still a kindness/mercy. Though I'd be interested to know what Magnus finds curious/suspicious about the contrast. Now I bet she wishes she had her hands in an ice bucket when he was helpless haha.

I hope Saphir feels the twinge of guilt, shame on him haha. Unless he has an attachment and is happier with her around in a cage or on the flip side is dedicated to ol M's happiness. Also after that last scene from the previous chapter I wondered if D or S felt any arousal from what they saw, if Magnus ordered them to watch for their punishment or hers? Or are they too loyal/desensitised to feel anything else? Such a strange little ensemble/team.

Also I wonder if M's stomach would have flipped if L turned the gun on herself instead of the commander. He may be obsessed with owning her, but she has a lot of power over him by just her existence. Lol and in the early days when she said 'I saved you and you're enslaving me this is wrong' was so horrible and I feel bad for smiling because the irony reminded me of Harrison Ford's 'I didn't kill my wife!' in the fugitive - with the 'I don't care' response haha.

Anyway I'm getting carried away 5* for great work and a speedy delivery! x"

I couldn't be more thrilled you got carried away! It feels good to know you thought it was worth getting invested in. Your takes are all pretty savvy, and I can promise that we're going to be getting much deeper into both Saphir and Daegon's mindsets very soon. I think it's going to be fun.

Your story is so hot but more than that it's an interesting read, please keep going! 😍😍

Also here is something I would love to see - he manages to find and capture her fiance (and/or child) and then use him/them to get her to submit completely...

However, I almost felt there was some intrigue lacking in this chapter. Nice sex action but unsatisfying in that this part seems more shallow than previous chapters in some aspect. Perhaps it's the teasing but unfulfilled bit of political machinations that could have made the read even better.

OMG what a perfect chapter! Absolutely love the way you have written the interactions between all the characters, and the scene is perfect. I was worried that you would make Magnus too angry and totally lose Lilah in the process, but it felt perfectly pitched. I’m so curious about how Magnus is going to deal with her out and about without showing his attachment or turning her further against him. I’m also super interested to find out wtf is with Saphir! Great plot twists so far and the scenes are so hot!

Re: NaiadAerial: "I enjoyed your latest chapter but was hoping for more talking, lol. Still I loved it and can't wait for your next update!"

Thanks for your encouragement! The next chapter will certainly have more talking, though among a wider group of people than you may have had in mind. I'm glad you enjoyed this one in spite of that. :)

Re: Ellienora35: "I would like to see her try and almost succeed to kill herself

After she comes with him in her butt, I would love to see her feel a bunch of guilt and think that she can take away some of his power by suicide. The chain is long enough that she could figure out how choke herself with it on the bedpost or something. Then Magnus will have to re-evaluate. And I am super curious why she shot her commander. I am hoping the next installment comes quickly."

Thanks so much for posting. The next chapter is definitely underway. The question of suicide is going to be an interesting one to explore when it comes to Lilah. I don't think it will be exactly what you're hoping for, but it will certainly come up in conversation.

Re: Anon: "Perfect

This was perfect after the escape. I had no interest in any other characters for chapter 7 except these two and you delivered 100%. Magnus is unbelievably hot and domineering, I just want to read more and more about him. You capture his power and intellect well. I like the gentle aspects too (they mean more) but in this chapter it was clear he wanted to both possess and punish her, very well done.

Loved the "they may suspect attachment" line. He should just acknowledge the obsession is obvious and make her his courtesan."

Thank you! I'm thrilled that you're happy with it. Lilah playing the role of concubine is definitely due for some more focus, and oh boy is that coming.

"Thank you so much for the speedy update! I have to say I was waiting eagerly for this. There's just something so hypnotic and magnetic about Magnus' words and actions, I'm always so mesmerized by him, especially with his interactions with Lilah.

I did find Lilah shooting her commander pretty out of place in chapter 6, and thought that it seemed incongruous for an author who writes so meticulously. And you just had to drop all these twists in this chapter and blow me away. Really fantastic work - I love all the details you put in here so so much. Gotta say I did /somewhat/ expect that there's something behind Lilah's actions, though the detail with Saphir and the water lily is just the bomb. Sneaky Saphir, and I wonder what else has he got in his mind? I'm getting way too invested now!

I can see why you replied that I'd be satisfied with this chapter when I mentioned I'm intrigued by the Lilah/Saphir interaction. All of the 4 major characters in this chapter are interesting in their own ways and it makes me just want to explore each and all of their interactions with one another. And also, a lil random but I'd love to see more Eris/Saphir interaction in the future too.

Thanks for the hard work once again, and do keep on writing! You've got all that good stuff hidden up your author's sleeves (;

x

Shinya"

Aww, thank you so much for the detailed reaction. It makes me feel wonderful that I lived up to your better expectations. We'll be getting to more reveals very very soon, and I hope you enjoy them. :)

I hope you keep this going!

Re: Anon "An idea

Your story is so hot but more than that it's an interesting read, please keep going! 😍😍

Also here is something I would love to see - he manages to find and capture her fiance (and/or child) and then use him/them to get her to submit completely..."

Thank you! I shall keep going, for sure, and I can safely promise that Magnus is going to be doing a lot of that kind of incentivizing.

Re: Anon "As usual, your writing is superb

However, I almost felt there was some intrigue lacking in this chapter. Nice sex action but unsatisfying in that this part seems more shallow than previous chapters in some aspect. Perhaps it's the teasing but unfulfilled bit of political machinations that could have made the read even better."

Thank you for the comment! You'll find there'll be a lot more intrigue in the next chapter. And I mean, a LOT.

"Yaaaaaaaas!

OMG what a perfect chapter! Absolutely love the way you have written the interactions between all the characters, and the scene is perfect. I was worried that you would make Magnus too angry and totally lose Lilah in the process, but it felt perfectly pitched. I’m so curious about how Magnus is going to deal with her out and about without showing his attachment or turning her further against him. I’m also super interested to find out wtf is with Saphir! Great plot twists so far and the scenes are so hot!"

Thank you for this wonderful comment! I laughed out loud when I first read it, and I've smiled every time I've read it since. I hope I can keep living up to your expectations!

I have mixed feelings about this chapter. Despite Magnus' previous treatment of Lilah, I felt his seduction and understood how Lilah was drawn to him. After this chapter, I felt bitter hatred and resentment towards him.

I read this chapter twice and each time, this sentence "And now I want you to be a good pet and scream for me." just made me furious as hell and I don't even know why.

Oh, please don't take this as a criticism of your writing, it is superb. I'm just really hating the Magnus character now.

As always, can't wait till your next installment.

I haven't visited Literotica in awhile because I was frustrated with all the incomplete and abandoned stories that were otherwise well written and engaging. But I just tested positive for COVID19 (my symptoms are relatively mild), so I'm stuck at home with time on my hands ... decided to check out the LIterotica mobile app and came across your story in the process. Now I'm hooked.

Love the world building in this story -- I know I've found a good writer when there's no erotic scenes like in one of your recent chapters and I was still thoroughly engaged.

I especially like when you write from Magnus's point of view....he's intriguing and his POV during the erotic scenes is... well...extremely hot. I imagine it's probably challenging to write from the male POV in noncon stories in such a way that it doesn't alienate or turn the reader off, but you've done a great job with Magnus and I want to know more about him.

I know it's hard to keep a story going when there's no financial compensation and other life priorities pop up, but I hope you continue. You're a talented writer.

Easily one of the most well-written pieces of erotica I've read, with a good balance between story and sex. Realistic characters, too, who are complicated and nuanced. I'm eager to see more of this, but I selfishly hope you're also doing some work in more commercial or literary areas if that's your jam, because you've got the talent for it.

"Please, more

I have mixed feelings about this chapter. Despite Magnus' previous treatment of Lilah, I felt his seduction and understood how Lilah was drawn to him. After this chapter, I felt bitter hatred and resentment towards him.

I read this chapter twice and each time, this sentence "And now I want you to be a good pet and scream for me." just made me furious as hell and I don't even know why.

Oh, please don't take this as a criticism of your writing, it is superb. I'm just really hating the Magnus character now.

As always, can't wait till your next installment."

Maybe it made you mad because you're perceptive and can tell that Magnus is a machiavellian sadist whose determined to mess with Lilah's head as much as possible? :P

Thanks for the comment. More is coming, and so is Magnus.

Been impressive so far. Well done

However, I have to say I'm with Lemonlimebitters. I lost something for Magnus in this scene. It's like when he said "You'll do what I want every moment I want." That made a part of me turn off . I have a feeling that Lilah is the type that loves and gives and has compassion that overflows but when someone goes to far her anger isn't hot it's cold. And that is so much worse. I sincerely hope Magnus feels some of that chill. If not, he may just destroy her and everything he loves about her. That being said. GREAT JOB! I normally don't become as invested in these stories as I am in yours.

Re: Damoiselle

Maybe it made you mad because you're perceptive and can tell that Magnus is a machiavellian sadist whose determined to mess with Lilah's head as much as possible? :P

Oh I know he is, that much is obvious by now. And I love a domineering sexy as hell villain to no end. I think what he did is true to character, which is very important in a well written story. I can suspend all believes in a fantasy world, but the characters must stay true. And now I eagerly await how Lilah might react. She has just killed her commander, her hope of escaped shattered, her trust in Saphir no more (that twist was ingenious) and she just got sodomised by her captor that she secretly lusts for. A lot to take in in such short period of time. She's not human if she's not feeling at least a little sorry for herself and a sense of despair. As much I think she eventually enjoyed that scene, I honestly don't think that a somewhat positive physical reaction equates to a positive mental reaction. I also know that she is stronger than she appears, and that she has a fire burning within that cannot be easily extinguished so I don't see her trying to commit suicide, but I do see her turning off, putting up an emotional barrier to protect herself from Magnus' sadistic mind f$#%.

By the way, in no way do I want to influence how you like to continue this story, if all the Lit stories are the way I want them to be, it would be a very boring world. And thank you so much for replying to my comments. I was here to check updates, and was happy when I saw your replies.

Re: anon 6/22/20

I know right, grrrrr! I wanted to turn around and slap that smugness off his face.

Please please please update and finish this story!

To those of you who have left comments recently, I cherish your input and your investment in the story. I'm hard at work on the next chapter, and I hope to have it up next week.

I hope that the muse calls to you and you finish more of this story. I'm captivated with it and hoping for more soon.

I don’t usually love domineering manipulative alpha males like Magnus, but you’ve managed to make him likeable. Perhaps it’s the fantasy setting where there are slaves which makes it ok, and not make him seem like some obsessed crazy psycho who fixates on a girl then kidnaps her to be a sex slave like many stores in this category, even though that’s basically what he does. It’s obvious he’s got feelings for Lilah, and she’s almost as obsessed with him as he is with her, in their messed up complicated relationship. Is it weird I am rather hoping for some type of HEA with these two, although I don’t really know how that would work. I do sort of feel that this chapter was a bit out of character for Magnus, but maybe emotions are heightened after almost losing her.

I’m waiting anxiously to see how they move on from that amazing last scene! I can’t get enough!

Loved every single paragraph of this chapter..really can't wait for more chapters

Now I can breathe again ... this chapter must have been either an incredibly painstaking process or you were completely ‘in the zone’ as you wrote it. Each word you used complements those around it and the entire chapter just flowed marvelously. Very nice.

Thankfully I started reading this last month, but I can see the upload dates between chapters and It is a little worrying. Not saying release a chapter asap but let us know that you're still here. Simple “here” reply would be awesome. It ain’t fun waiting years for a new chapter after been told and guaranteed by the author it’s in the works (not forgotten) and years go by without anything. I’m probably saying this cause they’re a couple of stories I’m reading that have not updated in a year plus. In all this I absolutely adore them, which means no matter how frustrated I get, I always come running back to check if anything has changed. I can see myself doing the same with this story as well. Heck I’ve been checking once a week since mid July.

While also working on finding a job.

I keep reading and rereading this sort of like awaiting a new book in a series. It is wonderful and I can't wait to see how you continue and ultimately finish the story. The interplay between all the characters shows that this story is more than just erotica, but that it has a plot and characters about whom the reader can feel emotional over, too. I know that life interrupts at times, but please know that your readers are anxiously awaiting more.

I am honestly shocked to read something of this caliber here. Not to say that there isn't great erotica on this site (of course there is), but this didn't read like erotica to me. As someone who reads A LOT of books, I can say without a doubt that your writing is worthy of mainstream publishing and I hope that you have already or will in the future pursue publication. You are clearly very talented, both with your use of language and your ability to bring characters to life. I haven't even read the other chapters in this story, yet this brief snapshot was enough for me to see that it's brilliantly done. Excellent work! I hope I can read your books someday soon (though of course I won't know it if I do!).

I hope he breaks down a little so she can start calling for him

why so much of brutality? he starves her ,humiliates her in front of his people,attacked her country ,such brutal anal rape why why so much of cruelty .she saved him after all, he is breathing torturing her becoz she gave him life.she is a good person .why all bad to happen to her .why is she so dumb and coward .why doesnt she commit suicide .anything is better than this treatment .she aint cheating on him with anyone she did everything he wanted .he calls this love ?.the least he could have done was to marry her given her a title of respect instead of giving her a title of whore .if he doesnt care that she saved his fucking life why the hell he is attracted to her in the first place .please can anyone justify this batard's deeds?

wow... the scene with Saphir using scents and oils on her..... is so heart-breaking and grotesque..... you've written it so well..... like she's being scented and decorated to be this lifeless sex toy doll..... for Magnus's pleasure.... it's such a difference when the person oiling you and making you smell 'pleasant' is a cold-blooded assassin soldier type employee of the main guy.... such a powerful, disquieting scene.....

i dont understand how can an anal virgin actually come in her first time with almost no lube,almost no anal play and that too a really big cock it sounds impossible even in stories.

literally everyone before me in the comment section has no complaints with

.everyone is enjoying what he did to her

not a single one to point out

makes me wonder that all the women here praising you actually came with their first anal with no lube

or everyone here is actually enjoying her pain and they like how roughly and with no preparation magnus pounded her

i wish it happens to all of them so they could too feel just as good as lilah anal cherry popping feels .

its not sexy its digusting

he is a sadist no doubt he enjoyed giving her a painful first time anal to remember till she is alive . he doesnt use whips or floggers yet as they might give her a permanent mark/dent which will be always visible to his eyes always reminding him about it and might ruin his fun so he resort to giving her internal pain which would give her pain but him only pleasure and also rough penetration will not mark her skin like whips etc so he resorts to rough sex both vaginal and anal as it gives him the pleasure of sex as it normally does but also hmm but also

he always loves giving her pain /humiliation and making her enjoy her pain and humiliation by always making her come

he is conditioning her mind to enjoy the pain as he has already fucked /conqured all her holes

he asks her to cry as she would suppress her cries to avoid giving him pleasure and with practice in future she will never cry or show any discomfort to him no matter how much pain he throws for her she will be conditioned to always welcome it both enjoying pain and be numb to it so yeah it is indeed dsm not yet bdsm

men always enjoy anal no matter how much its painful to recieving

partner anal sex is always their pleasure and always pain and rarely pleasure for receiving partner if they are lucky

one ques though i believe the story is quite in distant future so are they not that advanced ti have some anal lube as he always had planned to take her anal cherry

or was this anal sex purposely kept painful and memorable as a part of her punishment his revenge for running away as this was her first anal after all ?is it a one time thing as a punishment or

he enjoys anal w/o lube coz pusdy juice and fingure play is just not enough for anyones first time anal

i know he is way too possesive about her and theres a subtle hint that he loves her too but when he puts dildo inside het or when he starves her or when he initiates rough sex unsimulated sex on her it seems like he hates her more or he hates her kindness her goodness her empathy he hates her very being and he wants to push her to all limits till she lost all her characters she was born with to make her devoid of all her feeling to become something empty or hollow like him someone ungrateful like him

it seems he cant digest the idea that someone as kind and gentle like her could exist or should exist

he is like a satan who is sent to kill all the goodness or humanity that resides o earth

yet despite everything wrong with him you make him sound quite sexy,irresistable,handsome ,fierce and passionate lover in bed ,teasing and delicious smirks ,possessive and determined all the qualities of a bad sexy boy and dom

i wonder if her fiance if alive ever came back together with her would she be able to enjoy the sex they used to before war coz he will ruin both her mind and body petmanently that she might not enjoy normal lovemaking and intimacy by the time she goes to a normal life as she always came from rough and painful sex so a part of mind would always vrave for the pain and pleasure only magnus would be able to give her

Some very lengthy comments here!! (Some alittle obsessive which i hope the author sees as a compliment). You’ve kept Magnus in character, he is a leader and the enemy so there is no need for him to be ‘good’ which I appreciate. Its a great story, well told.