by Momstheboss
I really enjoyed your story. The title hooked me. A story that is plausible always outshines the over the top, that could never happen type of yarn, in my opinion. I liked your use of conversation and the fact that your characters came across as real people. My only suggestion would be to watch your punctuation. Was the cop screaming at Jed during what should have been a casual conversation? Nice work overall. Keep it up.
I really liked this story. The way you have of having the characters of your stories interact is truly amazing. Thanks for a great read.
Warren