All Comments on 'Iron Rain Pt. 05'

Lost Boy - you amaze me with each new chapter. Look forward to each with great anticipation. The blend of characters, situations, underlying threats and all the great sex just makes this an award winner! You certainly have my vote!

great story.

Like the others, great story. Please keep this series going, your stories help me get through my mornings at work :).

Loved the story even if it is hard to follow in some places. You seem to expect the reader to be able to read your mind sometimes.I'm sure you could add a couple of ch. to this already good story and I would like to read them when they're posted. Please we don't need more than two or three ch. more though. ( not a whole book for sure )

Hot sex with a touch of Espionage. This is a great nail biting series. It is also very erotic. I look forward to the next installment.

This was excellent, Have thought about cleaning it up a little bit, and writing as a novel to be published like Clancy. Really Good

Well written and edited,along with being fast paced.

A very interesting spy story along with being extremely erotic.

Thanks for the good read.

awesome series so far.... cant wait to read more

This is really a spy piece touched with eroticism. Nicely done... Fast paced, interesting with twists. Please keep'm coming.

First, I DID give this the full five. I f'ing love this series.

The Russian mob is not going to have many infiltrators in American police forces. Most small-town departments hire locally. Someone from out of town who hires on, stays a bit, then rapidly moves on is going to get red-flagged by hiring officers and by the background checks at her next department. Might want to think about that when this becomes a real novel.

Plus our hero's sudden chemistry skills at synthesizing advanced date-rape drugs is a little too much unless the computer system walked him through it.

This series would be a better fit for anal, non-consent, BDSM, or even Sci-Fi.

Insest/Taboo is inappropriate as there is no family relationship and nothing justifying taboo (except the categories cited above).

All fives here! First I believe someone said this was mostly miscatagorized, well while that may technically be so (probably not since I can see mom and daughter licking each other in the near future), but if the story had been put anywhere else, unless you can multi submit, then I would have never read it since I wouldnt have found it!

Pickyness: rape is rape, and the dude definately raped that ass! Well technically I suppose, definately rammed it in there without permission, but then again, even with her cussing and bitching she never once said to stop or pull out ;). ...HoWeVeR.... Lubed dick or no, she would have been screaming when he slammed it in and her ass would have probably still been bleeding from ripping... You just dont ram a big dick up s tight ass like that without some buildup without having serious problems. ..at least it was lubed, I dont know how many stories Ive read where the guy is shoving it in there with no lube, or maybe just a little from her pussy, and then writes it off like she enjoyed the hell out of it, thst nothing ripped and that there was no bleeding. Bullshit! Worse, the reason that pisses me off, is that kind of shit puts the wrong ideas in the head of some stupid fucker who has never had anal sex and he might go trying the same thing on a girl thinking its fine and dandy and that she'll like it. :(

Love the crystal computer stuff!! Ive actually thought about that before, kinda freaky! ...and love love the contacts :). The only improvement I could think of would have been, after drugging the couple, to get another 'mother and daughter' actresses to sub in when the two woke up, that way they would realize it was the wrong family! ...of course that would change the plot, hehe.

There was something else but i forget... Write on! :)

An observation - after knocking Linda out he fired three rounds into the ground. But when Linda comes to he told her that he had emptied the clip in the gun. Can't have it both ways.