All Comments on 'It Couldn't Be Helped Ch. 01'

Waiting for chapter 2

The setup was great. Looking forward to the rest.....

As a sistah, I absolutely loved it. Please give me more...I have to know what else happens!!

I appreciate your taking your time in setting up the characters' attitudes and states of mind, though at first you seem to be telling us more about it, rather than showing us. But it pays off once they start talking and interacting. Good, three-dimensional characters, whose actions are believeable, even (or especially) when they aren't that nice. And I, too, love black women who are both sexual and smart. Hoping for Chapter 2 soon.

voted it a three because of the ending but i think this could be a very good story if told right like the way it was written and look foward to the next part. "jakk"

Well written, interesting characters and a darn good story line. I really enjoyed the read and am really looking forward to chapter 2. Thanks for the yarn and keep up the good work.

Keep it up. Love the main character. Love the entire story. You are a really good writer.

One of the better ones I've read recently. Sounds like a real situation. I hate to say it, but I think it could definitely happen these days. Race relations are nowhere near as good as they should be.

I especially enjoy your attention to detail. I echo the kudus of the previous responses. I submit my comments having finished part two as well. Your editting indicates to me that this may be your first submission, but an effort pawed over for some time now. This is an inspiration, given I have considered putting pen to paper, but haven't yet.

HampDawg

OMG...this was so excellent! It is extremely realistic...and your insight into the whole racial scheme was superb in its detailed treatment. I especially appreciate it as I am a black female. Furthermore...the ending was hilarious! But most importantly it was SEXY...so SEXY.

This was phenomenal! the details and out come was well written.

What's good for the goose.... Loving your work. Looking forward to the next chapter.

Great story!

Five.

OMG! that was really good! :)

great story!

Great story so far and they didn't even have sex yet....Definately left me wanting to know what's going to happen next. Sucks I have to go out now, but I will be back to read the other chapters.

I've read and reread this story and I'm wondering if you'll ever write another

He's so messed up

WELL PLAYED SEAN! I REALLY WISH THERE WAS MORE TO THIS STORY, BUT I REALLY ENJOYED IT!;)