All Comments on 'It isn't Really Cheating Ch. 01'

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AnonymousAnonymous8 months ago

Good premise.

But sex was much too automatic. And too fast.

Needed slower build up. Needed her asking him for details about how he felt about her legs. What made them so attractive? Did he think about them when he masturbated? What else did he think about?

Needed dialog about how his cock looked/felt in her hand. Did he like the way she was jerking him off? Did his balls need attention too?

Four stars.

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